All Comments on 'Over the Waterfall'

Was all over the place, like pulp fiction. Yet on point to and drew me in. I love the ugly duckling to love of life, story. Best of all was the lovers passion finally having exposing itself. Good luck with your next piece, I look forward to reading it.

no guy horney or not is going to fuck an ugly girl never happen totally ruined at the start delete and stop writing you suck at it just way to unrealistic and dumb.

Well I liked it ( a four not a five) I must say it even got me laughing more than once.

But it just felt weird as hell. The whole part with Ming read like a drug trip.

I like the dialog between the brother and sister, sounded very good.

The back story could have used a bit more work I wasn't feeling anything for the parents and that should have been your heart string. When you write something like this you have two thing to be pulling... heart strings and G-strings and you have to tug both equally to get the higher scores.

The reader wants the sex part yea but you also have to get them very emotionally involved or it's just two people fucking. While there is nothing wrong with just two people fucking it tend to be a bit less in terms of enjoyable read. You want your reader to be going "WoW!"

Like I said liked it so keep it up and make the next story better than this one.

Thanks for the good reading.

Him fucking that ugly badly built bitch ruined it. I couldn't read past it to even get to the incest. If he's that desperate to fuck Ming he'll fuck anything with a hole.

That was way too creepy to be good!

Yeah; the ugly gal might have felt like a reach but overall I liked it; no deduct here for putting her in there.

A nice, fast read, pretty quirky but a lot of fun. It was different and entertaining. That pretty much makes it a five star tale as far as I'm concerned!

If you use the right name. Haverkamp not Havenkamp is the old couple in Caddyshack.

Loved it keep writing man

Fantastic cant wait for another edition

continue and ASAP

I've only been saying it wrong for 30+ years. Fuck! I thought it was Have N kamp.

Wonderfully funny story. Writer neatly executes family members offstage and maintains the momentum.

A fun story, but still very erotic, especially when he and his sister were making love. That was done very nicely.

One thing though, I've never met a woman who was to ugly to fuck, but I usually keep my eyes closed when I have my dick in a wet pussy. I'd have taken Old Ming on, just to watch her take it up the ass.

Thanks for the read.

five stars, mate!!! Five stars!!

Regarding Ming the Merciless/Merciful/Mercenary, Oh hell, in my country we have a saying:- An upright dick has no conscience.

That was enjoyable fun. congrats boss.

at Ming the Mercilessly Ugly :-D

Funny as hell . . . . . GREAT story!!!

Unbelievable . . . . . sure. No one mentioned this was a factually accurate documentary.

Ming . . . . the big one eyed warrior can't actually SEE. It doesn't NEED beauty . . just a nice warm juicy cave.

This was a very entertaining read. Still, my heart kind of pangs to have a woman like Ming. I'm glad that Steven got the happiness he was looking for.

Great story! Would have loved to have seen what happens with the stripper though!

About Ming... "And a bag for me too, in case hers falls off".... Reminds me of the beginning of Kingpin, and Woody Harrelson puking after he had to "pay his rent".... You write some good stuff....