All Comments on 'Overwhelmed'

An editor would have helped but you still wrote an excellent story. You gave us an insight into Carina's thoughts. That was quite a build up to the "climax." The sex scenes were real and a turn on. Nice job, and I will "stay tuned" BellaGirl!

This is so well written! I can't wait to show it to my partner

I enjoyed the story, but I would definitely recommend an editor and proofreader. I noticed several base words missing endings (like -s and -ed). I hope you continue.