by hrefnadrakis
that women should not attempt to write gay porn. This was another awful example. Please stick to what you know.
Story had good potential, but it was very confusing at the beginning. What kind of work did they do for Jeana? And they're at her house? Okaaaay. And who is Mischa? And Dylan? Totally confusing. And I sincerely doubt anyone who isn't stoned/drunk could sleep through someone sticking 3 fingers inside them. I would rework it to make the set up clear.
Thank you for your feedback. I appareciate the constructive criticism. This piece was a bit awkward and I believe it is because the muse inside wanted to focus on Misha (nickname for Mikhail) and Gavin. I actually DO write better Slash than this. I don't think of it as porn at all.