All Comments on 'Pancakes and Shopping Trips'

[07.07.23]

Que Romantique!

11/10!!!!!

Good story!

4

Very nice story, D.A.! Thank You!

"I opened a mother beer" had me laughing out loud. Back to page one.

JPB

"my attorney pooped up..." Even better. Thanks .Back to page two...

JPB

I was wavering between four stars and five. I settled on five well earned stars. Too bad JT turned skank.

JPB

I enjoyed this tale very much, even with all the typos. DAMN, JT was a bitch! 5 stars. DMW aka

Another self-centered, self-entitled slut of a bitch, but seriously? His brother picking up with her and expecting the MC not to care?

4.5 stars. Yes he gets a happily ever after, and best revenge is living well. But the asswipe won. She got to cheat, she got to treat him like shit without even being told off, she didn't get embarassed by her cheating being published, she won the house and presumably all the money in divorce, and she has no problem finding idiots to fuck and use like Billy.

Sloppy writing

This is picky but, when in the bedroom with Evie the first thing Ben did was remove his pajama tops - then about two paragraphs later Evie removed his pajama tops?

Needs a final update on JT. Was her cavalier disrespect for her husband rewarded or did karma pay a visit?

Was kinda weird that his brother was not put off on JT fucking around after the heart attack, but then dumped her after he found out she did it before. As has been said” the definition of insanity, is doing the same thing, but expecting different results” . JT was a slut, and was never going to be loyal. This seems to be the new reality in our society. Marriage is on the way out, because the two sexes really do not need each other......

lame ending and no retribution for JT but still a good read. 4

Kinda sounds like they're in their 40's at least.... a widowmaker heart attack? THEN, at te end, "I want lots of kids"??? Did I miss the age reference? Pretty poorly written.

Look, you DO NOT go after your brother's ex no matter what. Dick move by Billy.

This author pretty much writes the same story over and over again. He just changed the setting and the name of the characters.

Show some respect for your readers and proof your stories before posting. Some obvious grammar issues that could be easily corrected with little effort

Took you long enough, Ben. 5 stars, the Bear DOES love happy endings. And Pancakes.

The BEAR

Again. I really like the happy ending, but JT and Freddy should have bled a little.

Guessing the rest of ur stories are the same u should try a new theme or not see u haven't written in a few years

She was a lovong wife that only cheated after her husband couldn't give her the cock she craved but then it turned out that she had been a cheater all along... It feels like a bunch of justifications after the fact and just lazy writing...

Femdom agitprop well told..

How old was he that he had a Widowmaker, and then wanted kids?

Didn't make sense, first his brother was going to bring JT then he comes up with some half assed story about her cheating ways. Even assuming it to be true, they didn't have kids so it wasn't a real relationship, just play acting.

After having a heart attack, taking the blue pill is a really bad idea, far worse than continuing to eat bacon and other artery clogging, salt laden garbage.

I don't think this second marriage will last very long, probably about as long as his extremely short life expectancy.

45 and above is the general range for widowmaker heart attacks.

Lifestyle, eating habits and genetics are the 3 significant pointers aside from age.

Sure you can have kids after 45 but the real question is whether your sperm is up to it and whether they're capable of producing non defective off-spring. For the woman, 45 is really pushing it, unless you're happy with downs.

Perhaps more importantly is that when the kids are just leaving Uni you'll be 66, when they get their first home, get married and have kids you'll be lucky to still be alive.

When you do the maths, having kids in your 20s is the only thing that makes sense.

As others have pointed out your story badly needs proofreading and spell checking. These errors are such a distraction from the flow of the story.

Good story, resonated with me sadly.

I don't want to labour the point, but even free writing packages have rudimentary spell checkers.

4 ' is your score! Great story, crap editing.'