by Recidiva
why do you move from the past to the present narrative tense in such an apparently random way? good story, decent style, but going from 'was' to 'is' and back again soured it for me.
Very hot. When he's describing that he going to take her... /really/ good. I think this may be my favorite.
The passion between them is so intense and well described you can't help but be part of it. There was a point in the story, where he took her against the door, that I literally had to stop reading and compose myself in order to be able to breath again. And that's a first for me.