All Comments on 'Pat's Pounding Ch. 01'

More of this story please!!!

Dommy Futa Mommy's, locking their sons away in Chastity is exactly my kind of fun, your story is well-written and thoroughly engrossing, looking forward to the next episode :))

So looking forward to chapter 2.

I love this. Please do carry it on further

This story is unfinished.

Did the mothers originally have cocks, or were they transformed?

Great start can't wait to see what happens!

More please.

yo wtf did i just read? pls tell me that the sons are actually all adopted or stolen kids or lab babies

This is a story, not a comic script. And even if it was the latter, this is too cliche and basic. Develop the characters and the world a bit, put some intrigue in there. Where's the hook if I don't know anything about the characters and everything about where the story is going?

Good start but it is too short. Need more.

You lost me as soon as I saw this: "that which often alluded others" ... the verb you're looking for is "elude". To allude is to "suggest or call attention to indirectly; hint at.", whereas to Elude is to "escape the understanding or grasp of". Sorry to be pedantic, but use a dictionary and/or see if someone will volunteer to edit/proof your efforts, also it seems like you're intentionally trying to use convoluted and elevated wording where something more direct and simple would work better.

This seems very cliche with this type of trope. The premise sounded interesting, but by the end I was sadly left uncaring for what came next as it's just following the same formula we've all seen time and time again.

It's well written, Pat was actually rather interesting in his intelligence, but the story falls flat as another cultish futa male rape.

Wow. This is starting off fantastic. Looking forward to a long series