All Comments on 'Payback'

Exactly what I say in my Walter Mitty inner voice !

What kind of people read it and enjoy it? Wow.

For the read.

Quite logical. Like marriage is logical. In his defense, after only three months of marriage, a wife in love doesn't say shit to her husband about cheating on him. In her defense, he couldn't have loved her that much. Obviously, they were not a match. Bottom line, love is not logical, not a business and not a contract. Still worth four stars.

betrayed!

destroys and kills more than it saves. TK U MLJ LV NV

Nuff said.

Fat fingers...

. . . it seemed like it was still trying to convey a message. Trouble is, it ain’t much of a message.

omg run as fast as you can Susy Q...dont waste one more second with this pompus ass.she is the one w/ grounds for a restraining order....yikes...stlcris

The joke itself is funny. This story is like a mental pickaxe handle. The wife is better off divorced. The guy, along with his mom and dad, can find some humorless, brainless twit and the four of them will be very happy. The pronouns were totally confused in this story, making an already strange story even stranger.

Despite how financially savvy he pretends to be, he tells on Lakers for small repairs, and uses his father like an unpaid bitch to do his own work for him.

You basically turned a joke into a story about a bunch of assholes

Um, once married it’s not his income it’s their income. It’s not his house it’s their house. He’s a pussy-whipped work-a-holic until she uses the same joke he did and then he goes caveman on her? Okay she is a self-entitled princess, what did he do to change that? Nothing. He’s no better than her father, worse in fact. The guy is a douchebag.

What a trainwreck. You took a well-worn, dead-horse-beaten, joke and turned it into a typical, trope-filled, cliche-ridden, Loving Wives dumpster fire of a butthurt, whiny, cuck lecturing his dumb-as-rocks little girl of a wife.

Jesus. You people really need counseling.

Loving Wives has been an absolute wasteland for weeks now. This line from the story pretty much sums it up: “Since you are reading this, on this site in this section you already know it did not end well.“

Yep.

Too many editing errors for a one-page story.

Half the story is background that really has nothing to do with the story, and a re-hash of a joke. I think I read that on the other site under Jack Spratt's "Jokes and Giggles," maybe you should give him a co-write credit!

Sorry, guy, but I have to ask, why? The first line is straight out of our Sycophants Anonymous intro. "Hello, my name is Randi, and I'm a sycophant." Why?

Then there was the labeling thing. Why? "Background," "Her," "Her idea of a lesson." You know, there are these things called transitions. You should give them a try.

Then there was the narrator. What a wretched and stupid dolt of a man, with his wretched doltish parents. I cannot imagine why any woman would have married him, and why, having made that mistake, she wasn't getting it annulled before the sun went down the first day. She should thank God every day that she is safely away from those creatures. Better luck next time.

I thought this story was original, therefore I don't understand your preamble. It had some elements I hadn't seen on literotica before, and without a lot of useless drivel. Well done! 5*

I can't unread that crap

This story seems to be about two people that aren't willing to actually talk to each other. She might be a bitch but, he is definitely an ignorant, stubborn POS/ a**hole. Really, who wouldn't have a decent conversation/remind their wife, if they truly loved her: "hun, dad and some friends are coming over tomorrow and, it will be fixed then."

Not having simple conversations such as this makes it seem that he really didn't want to be married in the first place. Guy seems too juvenile and deserves to be single and/or have things he "loved" taken away. Both characters show they need to mature A LOT before they'd attempt marriage; too bad there's not a maturity test for those who would get married or, have children for that matter.

It is where Amyyum lives🤔.

If you don't want a bitch for a wife,

don't marry one!

This story was generously over the top.

Like stories were wifes fuck

everybody but the mailman.

Not my cup of tea.

But I liked the wise words

from his father.

That, for me, saved this story.

So thumbs up for that Myhands316!

. . . but it had some amusing moments. He seemed a bit over the top irrational, but that's OK, I guess, for the story line.

what was the point of this story, everyone looks like trash and foras smart as the man thinks he is he is actually a dumbass in marrying the wife. stupid people have stupid marriages, wife isn't only to blame husband doesn't know what a husband is if he thinks money is all that he needs to bring into the relationship. Both parties are utter failures as people.

but she's toxic. no empathy. dude worked his ass off. she should pitch around the house or make calls for repairs. at the very least be loving and supportive of a man that busted his rump all week.

counselling will not work, because she needs one on one therapy first. comments say he needed communication skills, this woman can't read all the non verbal cues that the man needs a day to himself, or at least a day NOT working. he's not a dick, he's a man....men need space. to decompress. all you silly virginal white knights and feminist underwater dance theory types preach all the time about giving a woman her space, but your double standards are showing. tut tut. lol

I thoroughly enjoyed all three of your “Loving Wives” stories. I hope you keep contributing to this category.

5 stars!

That would make sense. The guy thinks he is the best thing to come along since toilet paper and his beloved mother agrees. His wife, like most wives, wants a nice home and have it in working order. He thinks she is way out of line by asking him to maintain things around the house, when he has secretly made plans to take care of the problems. She has no idea, but his mom and dad do. He is a momma's boy that thinks he is a true macho hombre, as do his parents. His wife is sexy, smart, and good in bed, but he and his parents feel she should be kept in the dark on matters concerning her home. She certainly should never make a joke or nag him because she should know he has secretly made plans to correct the problems. They think the house is his and she should take a hike so the three of them can find a more suitable wife. In the end, he divorces a woman far too good for him while mistakenly thinking he is too good for her, mostly because his momma told him he was. This shit does happen to young men with domineering mothers. Looking at it as a parody of the usual LW story, it makes more sense, but perhaps it is too subtle for us readers.

This wife was so lucky to be rid of this self centered fool before she gave him children. At least she got away young enough and with a lesson to never marry a mommies boy again. 1*

i loved it i can relate to it though it didnt result in divorce but same shit different pile. i enjoyed all your stories hope you keep them coming.

Short but to the point. I enjoy the concept of his reasoning. Thank you.

From an old joke the writer constructed a good flash story...3*

I agree wife was lucky to get rid of this self centered fool and if the author really thinks like the guy did, well, you pretty much know I think he's like that in real life and I hope he's not married. Probably not anyway!

Couldn't possibly give a 5 to anyone who thinks soccer is the "real football".

This story should be known as "A Tale Of Two Retards".

if any couple deserved to be inflicted on each other, it's the one in this obvious parody

He looks and sounds like one more mis-educated college punk who thinks intelligence is being clever with your tongue instead of your hands. At age 50 I abandoned the contrived unethical white collar world and entered the world of electricians, HVAC, and refrigeration mechanics. In the white collar world you can accomplish almost anything if you can talk clever and fuck people over. In the trades there are plenty of thieves and charlatans too. The difference is, no amount of talking bullshit will make a broke machine or system work. So while this guy thought he was clever and cute, it was the wife that finally used her brain and her talents to get shit fixed.

Oh, she's a whore? Naw, she's just in a different type of prostitution than her soon to be ex husband. And starting tomorrow she can become a loyal loving intelligent wife to her next husband, while her EX will still be a whining incompetent moron who can't do anything except sit behind a desk, push paper, and talk bullshit about how superior his college education makes him. What's really funny is that those guys with the dirty hands and the service trucks are making way more money than the average college graduate. And guess which jobs can't be outsourced to India or China or Mexico?

This really is a great portrayal of what is wrong with the American education system. Something like 20,000 jobs in the skilled trades go unfilled every year, yet Vocational Tech schools have almost empty classrooms. And High School shop classes have been all but eliminated in most school districts, especially the cities, where the demand for skilled tradesmen (and women) are the highest. You wonder why so many Latino's are entering the Trades? Its not because they can't find jobs as Insurance salesmen or mid-level managers. Its because they are too smart to work as white collar lint pickers, and they could care less if somebody looks down on their dirty work clothes and hands. I'm sure they hang their heads in shame and humiliation, all the way to the bank, to make deposits.

A great story about a very fortunate woman and a very stupid man. I suspect the wife won't make that mistake again. I doubt the ex-husband has learned anything, useful.

This guy doesn't even try to communicate with the woman (how about "don't worry about that, it's being fixed tomorrow" or "that's being replaced in a few days" as replies to her requests instead of "what do I look like, a _______!" followed by just leaving like a dick) and then he goes ballistic and leaves her flat for what was almost certainly a statement in jest, even declaring that whether it was or wasn't, it doesn't matter. Any fucking jerkoff who equates a cheater to someone who once pulls a shit practical joke or says something fucked up once to get his attention is a guy who is too high strung to be married to anybody. Seriously, can we have stories where the husband is not a creampie eating pussy cuck wimp or a goddamn psycho who expects a compliant barefoot pregnant slave who lives in the kitchen?

It was fun to read but really frustrating, Hey, anybody can have a bad day, be snippy and argumentative. Arguments and sometimes snippy statements (that a couple later gets past) happen in almost all marriages. But those who understand love understand how to get past it . . . usually through good communication. This guy loves no one except maybe himself, and really wants a mute as a mate. No one, anywhere, says the right thing all the time. And his Dad is just as bad . . . far more arrogant and sanctimonious than his father-in-law.

Let's look at the likely future of this former couple.

Jordon is too stubborn to grow or even give an inch. After his third or fourth marriage (and probably one kid he's too full himself to care about), he gives up on women. They're all arrogant bitches who can't appreciate him (in his mind). His father comforts him, telling him not to worry, there's a good woman out there for him somewhere. He has a few other meaningless relationships, but word gets out, ans soon only the desperately lonely and/or heavy inebriated show any interest . . . and none of them long term. He probably dies fairly well-off financially, but alone and bitter.

His ex, heavily shaken by this experience, becomes more cautious, more appreciative, and more communicative. After being divorced for 8 months or so . . . she tentatively starts dating again. Her father tells her there's a good man out there for her somewhere, and he's right. After several months of dating, she begins to consider herself lucky to have gotten out of a marriage to a true asshole. After a year or two she meets and marries a really great guy. She is more mature and appreciative, and ready for marriage this time. They have three kids, adopt another, and have wonderful happy lives. One day, several decades later, she's playing with her grandkids when an old friend runs into her, and tells her that Jordon was found dead alone in his beautiful, well-appointed house. It takes her several moments to remember who that was.

Hello,

1, I guess I missed out on part of the humor. Yes, both people acted like assholes, that's the point...LOL So, lighten up, smile, it's nothing more than a silly story about people overreacting, getting married too young, thinking the wrong things, and just acting like idiots. Yes, I threw in as many cliches as possible in the space allowed.

2, pronouns, pronouns, and even more pronouns. Yes pronouns can be difficult when you have taken only a couple of hours to write something. Self editing sucks, and ever since the stroke I have to look at the f#*^ing keyboard all the time, since my right side isn't what it once was. Getting better every day though.

3, Thank you for the remarks on the story, but please remember, this is fiction, as in not real, just my knee jerk reaction to a stupid joke on FB. I do like the fact that people get so engrossed in the story, and I try to make my characters real, both in a good and bad way, but it is still just fiction though.

Once again,

Thank you for your constructive comments and votes

Myhands316

Obviously your back from that extensive home renovation. I thought this was a funny take on an old joke, new on Facebook. I gave it 4 stars. Looking forward to your future stories.

This is a cute little story, but the differences in these two individuals would have been settled long before marriage or the marriage wouldn't have happened.

Really? All he had to do was tell his wife that tomorrow everything would be taken care of. It is called communication. No need to storm out in a rage.

Neither are ready for marriage. Both need to grow up.

THe wife was well rid of this self righteous asshole. What a prig!

One. It doesn't follow in the footsteps of so many other stories about a wife trying to manipulate a husband and having him jump through hoops. That is merely training him to be a cuckold.

And two. That is pretty much how I would have handled it. Good work. I realize you can't write one like this every time. But this one is a real winner.

For those of us who have been there to feel good about. What we wished we had done. Made me feel good and nobody was hurt.

That's the way to do it.

Because all people portrayed were already exaggerations and the most extreme caricature of each model.

That's what made it fun.

Thanks

Lighten up, you trash writers with your comments when they submit their creations that it does not jell with your oh so righteous outlook or emotions. How about you submit your own Great Masterpiece, your previous, and only, submission was almost a year ago. And at that, not exactly so thrilling, although the scoring is surprisingly high.

I say, Myhands316, go for it! This one was original, created a snigger or two, and had at least one truth - Honor thy Father and thy Mother. They have seen it all, lived it all, learned the hard way, then just to guide us not to make the same mistakes they saw.

A-men brother. With all the cuckling horseshit going on these days

it's too bad we can't cane the cheating bitches!

How does anyone reach that point in life without knowing how to change a lightbulb?

loved it

Clearly, these are two people who have no business being married to anyone until they grow up quite a bit more... but, well, they did get married, and divorce is the way to get out of that.

I kind of loved the husband's response of "No, I'm not going to get a divorce, I'm going to get an annulment! Because... why exactly? Because I want one, apparently!" I can see the legions of sad divorced men slapping their foreheads, going "Gee, why didn't I think of that!"

... or, you know, back in reality, you need actual grounds for an annulment. There's no such thing as a "no-fault annulment". You basically have to show that the marriage wasn't validly entered into (e.g., you were drunk) or that one spouse lied or concealed specific crucial information (e.g., a drug habit, impotence, bisexuality, lying about wanting to have kids) that rises to the level of fraud. If "She was secretly a bitch" counted, you'd have a lot fewer husbands losing half their shit in a divorce.

In all actuality, it is easier to get an annulment than divorce as long as it is properly filed before six months has passed. No reason other than "Married Under False Pretenses" is needed. And, in most states you do not have to prove what the false pretense is, just that you do not want to be married because of it. The cost is the same for filing a divorce action, but as soon as it is filed then everything goes into ambiance.

How do I know this? Because I've done it! My false Pretense was that instead of loving me, she was trying to access my psychical and monetary property. The Judge said okay, signed it, and presto chango, I'm no longer married to the bitch. But, it HAS to be filed before that first day of the sixth month or to divorce court you go. The only exception that I know of is if there is a child involved. Say you knock her up, marry her right before birth and then no matter what you must get a divorce. But other wise, annulment is possible in the first six months in most states. The other Annulment, being a church annulment, will take much longer for those religions that offer them... just saying.

Still don't get it. This one slid right by me this time too. No point to it at all.

T T T dont care if you cry, TK U MLJ LV NV

Your writing is still quite good but has gotten a lot darker of late...

I love this story. Staight to the point.

I think this author should go and spend more time on Facebook, since that’s where he said he got the idea for this story, and less time writing and posting stories here on Literotica. This story was disjointed from the get-go, and was just hard to understand.

Thank you for making a retarded meme into an amusing story.

Read and learn! 5-Stars!

Guy was an absolute douche, and I'm wondering if it's an autobiography.

Dought he will ever get married again

The cum loving cucks are out in force on this one.

Great job, Myhands, not only did you write a great entertaining and on point story, but you pissed off the Lit-Losers, all in one fell swoop.

Job very well done.

Got it this time. This, on second read, turned out to be a good one. He dodged years of bullets by dumping this bitch.

Good story when you piss them off. Not the only sign but it worked well this time. ...It was Paul Harvey. And as Robin said "Fuck'em if they can't take a joke." Me, I was in the trades for over 30 years and I agree with Jordan's dad. Signed: BTW

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Load of B.S.

You've upset a few undesirables?

That's worth points alone, just because....

Still, I'll award the story on how I feel about it anyway, being an appreciative reader.

Damn, people, this is just an expansion of that joke, with the added benefit of a reaction that brought a bit of balance. Plus... the dude did right by himself. Don't like it, go whine in your cream pie.

Funniest comment I read was this one strange statement... nothing else said, but "They deserve each other".

Huh? What? Did you read this at all? Hahahaaa!

They didn't end up together, so how does your comment relate? On top of that, she got what she deserved, which was a boot in the arse and that's about it, and he got the hell out of a bad deal free and clear, which he deserved.

Go back to reading ukresearcher, you dribbling twit.

Good story. Yes, sfory. Not real life. Fiction. Fantasy. A product of the author's imagination. Some people act like these stories are real life. It's fun stuff. Enjoy it or "turn the page."he

Good stuff, Maynard. 😁

Haha, talk about trigger-happy! It's fun to imagine this guy going through life blowing up at everything he comes across.

The two letters above are what those Below are Missing Now If She had asked are these things on the List to be done it Might have Gone differently But NO she was not happy with asking that question She Just wanted Her way or nothing and She got Nothing.. Moral of this story is simple Give your Mate Respect and Trust them to do what is right and you get happiness and things get done Do not give Trust and Respect you find where the Curb is. Now If She had given Him a Beer and asked if He wanted a snack and at Half time ask what I said She might have still had a Marriage Point to any person ready to tie the knot first get to know how the other Person is treated in their Family Home. If she has to do things for Herself and get's praised for doing that from Her parents you might have a winner , But if She whines and it is done for Her Run like Hell She will treat you the same way!

That story is the absolute truth.

Just for getting all the cucks to stop eating their creampies for 2 minutes and up mounting their soap boxes.

I thought Jordan was a lazy, sarcastic, and entitled guy. I mean, I try to do what I can for my wife because she puts a lot of work into our house. Jordan wouldn't Gove his wife the time of day if it was on a weekend. He acts like he does, then when she uses a bit of sarcasm back, he takes her story as truth and acts like a little boy. To make it worse, his dad is the same way. To me, the wife did nothing wrong. I'm surprised that she didn't figure this out before the were married.

Before I get yelled at too mucj, I believe the wife has to do something bad enough to deserve the treatmenon this site he gave her. There are plenty of other stories where the wife does deserve her bad treatment. This story wasn't one of them. Yes, I did read the beginning of the story. Hope people aren't taking me too seriously about my opinion. I'm not.

The MC behaved like a 6-year old. Yikes! What a story.

Great.

Yes it is a story. The MC is an idiotic 4 year old - does not rate a 6 year old status as another commentator said. The wife is moronic they deserve each other and should be made to stay together for the term of their natural life. Of course both should be spayed so that their is no chance of breeding.

LOL Great

What a frickin' neanderthal. Has he ever heard of conversing with his wife? Maybe try to explain instead of expecting her to read his mind to know what the plan is? D-bag.

Okay!

4

I enjoyed it but in my state i doubt he gets the house free and clear and it would be divorce not annulment.

Psycho main character

Wow, that husband is a whiney bitch. She's better off without him. She can find an adult now....

Loklie

3 stars for trying the MC is a hypocritic ass. Instead of talking to her and explaining the fact a new fridge was coming or that his father was coming the next day to help fix things he makes those stupid smart ass remarks then gets pissed when she makes one. Granted she may have acted a bit entitled but he was the bigger ass in this story, she deserves far better than him.

Bible says you reap what you sow!! I think she got exactly what she deserved!! Hubby works 27 days straight to give wife all the fancy stuff she just has to have... deal with it lady!!

Bang on, the force is strong in this one.....

She's better off without him - it seems that he can dish it out but he can't take it.

An appropriate response to a typical stupid self-absorbed narcissistic woman. A little bit too simple perhaps, and it was not well written where it changed from conversation to another day's conversation or whatever. An editor would be a good idea. Otherwise sone good parts of the story get lost...

Their marriage was shit. She was an entitled bitch that cheated or lied. He's a dickhead that couldn't be bothered to tell the actual plans because of fucking soccer. Choosing instead to be a smartass prick.

They deserve each other, both are jerks in their own ways. Hopefully they stay made enough at each other that they don't reproduce. The jokes were kind of funny but carried too far.