All Comments on 'Penny? Dreadful!'

But if this is all there is, then I must say it's completely unfinished. I did find her timing odd. Philip must have known she was leaving her husband and coming to stay with him that day. Why would he be banging some farmer's wife at the time he expected his "girlfriend" to show up? Seems a bit uncouth, if you will. But leaving us with her driving to the hospital and Roger waiting to talk to his therapist the next day seems like nothing going nowhere fast.

Tell is there's more to this story...

...but seems like there's a lot more story to tell here. A chapter 2 maybe? Thanx!

Loklie

Just desserts for a heartless shrew. Thanks for sharing, Mr. Black.

At first I was thinking, that fucking bitch and then at the end I couldn't stop laughing. Great story for being so short. 5*****

Good story! She most definitely burned herself.

"Hey honey... I've been fucking your best friend for years, made you have a nervous breakdown, and now I'm leaving you to be with him... but I bought you a Netflix subscription to make up for it. Hope we can still be friends!"

The absurdity of Penny's letter did make me laugh.

This was a good idea for a story, but it was so short and didn't resolve anything. Did you only post half of it by mistake?

Very good but seems unfinished. 4 stars

It was a good start to a story but every reader is left wondering what is going to happen next. Why would she want anything to do with Phillip after what she found out?

had to laugh at the end ,,, a great little story ,, but ,, i think it needs an ending ,, however it deffinatley got the 5 it deserves ,, thanks for sharing

Thanks for this amusing little story.

It's begging for a sequel. An alternative crunch might have been for the police to have done a registration check and nailed the lie about her address. A stiff talking to, an on the spot fine and sent back home. Thank you.

You’ve only told half a story. If there’s no chapter 2 coming, then you’ve wasted your time as well as mine.

Living just outside of Church Stretton, which isn't far from

the beautiful town of Shrewsbury, it was great to read some

of the places that you refer to, especially the Boat House pub

on the outskirts of the quarry; can't wait to get back there for

a pint overlooking the Severn. A good read, thank you.

Go to the hospital... and get a good dose of "COVID...Idiotits"

I enjoyed your premise, however, I too felt the story was left unfinished. Ignore comments concerning overuse of punctuation, it's nice to take a breath while reading.

Thanks very much for this funny little flash. Karma has sharp teeth indeed! ;-)

Good build up but seems unfinished. Thanks for the read.

A lot of the story is missing, which makes almost all of the details in the story extraneous and wasted words. I learned more about the Welsh language than I did about what happened.

...I do hope for a bit more, but my imagination is running full strength. Hey, that’s what you wanted, right?

"What goes around comes around".

Great story!

5 stars!

Can't really grade it until I know there will be a part 2. If this is it three stars if there is a conclusion 4 1/2.

Yes indeed, it seems very incomplete as it came to an uncertain end. I could make a few comments, but those would just be suggestion on how to tie up the loose ends. As I pondered what more to say, the realization came to me that I really don't care what happens to Penny-dreadful.

wasn't intended to be funny, but it actually kept me laughing. The "PS" following the body of the letter? Hilarious. The narrative and dialogue are not merely awkward, they clunk along like a wagon with triangles for wheels. There's a reasonable plot in there somewhere, but it's hard to notice because of the unintentional humor.

This author writes far better than this. During this ridiculous Corona panic I've seen story after story by good authors that are much below standard. Baffling.

I have to wonder what injuries Philip has - maybe just a concussion and a couple of broken bones or was his equipment hopefully permanently damaged. Penny's life is going down the drain. Roger needs to recover and finds someone new and she can regret for the rest of her miserable life her choices.

All that business about buying her husband some entertainment as she leaves him for his best friend is about as shallow as it comes. I expected her to find him dying of COVID, but the farmer worked, too. It leaves her with anger instead of sadness, but it leaves her alone either way. Very good story!

I consider myself a bit of a comma fanatic, and I didn't think this overdid the commas. I actually thought that there was one missing!

In any case, I think that Randi would never claim to be perfect, but she is one of the best editors on the site, many of us would say THE best.

I'm not sure if the earlier breakdown should have been in the story, particularly his suspicions of the affair.

BTW, I can understand her printing out the letter, but she couldn't even hand print the envelope?

Great but far to short.

Needs more chapters.

Were they trying to cause him to suicide?

What about revenge?

Tells us what happens to him as he sounds fragile.

Enjoyed it. No cure for a cheaters deceit. Cymru hello Llanboidy

I spent several years living near Shrewsbury so thank you for that. Story was a little stilted for you and seemed short but certainly told a decent tale, thanks for that too😀

Doctor thanks for seeing me, I need your help in determining why I'm such a poor judge of character.

Did your fingers get tired? It was a barely mediocre story to begin with but to leave it like you did. Pitiful writing regardless of the smoke being blown up your ass by others.

Roger should buy his best friend a pint at the pub when he get's out of hospital for saving him from a slut wife and then take his outside and ba=eat the piss out of him for being such a snake. 5*

Not at all a satisfying story. Beginning , middle and ending a worthless effort. Dreadful indeed.

Is this a teaser for a story?

Story feels unfinished

What will you do now? Everyone will know what you did. No one will take your side or let you stay with them. Will homeless shelters take in people during the lockdown?

Good start but left as is it is very incomplete. I look forward to further chapters.

Please continue with this. You definitely need to do a part 2 please this is just what I need to keep me going. This is just getting juicy I want to know what the dumbest bitch is going to do now since the stupid bitch has burned all her bridges . This is just getting better by the second and need to find out how bad her lover is hope he had his balls blown off that would be nice to see . I love BTB stories they are just fantastic because they make a mockery of this thing called being a cuckold is great thing . Being a cuckold is like being called scum on the bottom of your shoe that no red blooded male ever wants to be. So giving him all the tv things that is a kick in the teeth I just love to know what she does now. Will she go grovelling back to her other half doubt full. Will she go to a friend not a chance because of the stay at home thing. So come on make a part 2 I’d love to see how this dumb bitch copes .

Well ... not exactly an LW situation, according to my standard ( which it that it has to involve the effect of the ‘adventurous’ behavior on the marital relationship.) Close, however! BUT ... Really lacking on the ‘erotica’ in litEROTICA! The biggest quibble, however, is that Sweetie is either as CLUELESS as Hubby, or is a hopeless optimist. As the trio are presented to We-The-Readers, they have known each other for a long and close time. Phylip (I like it) is an inveterate bounder, skirt-chaser, player!

She should have seen evidence of this for years! “I will fix this guy because he is so much in love with me that he will change his player-stripes into pinstripes and we will live happily ever after!” Hell, anyway, Sweetie was going to cheat on Phylip (perhaps even with Robert.) If there IS a Ch2 being considered, getting herself back into Roger’s bed as the cucker, rather than the cuckold, would earn a buncha red hearts!

Good story! I guess she got what she deserved in the end. Hopefully, the husband will never take her back.

5

Couple of notes. The story was not intended to be funny, but, as with several of my stories, it was meant to be amusing.

And why wasn't the story finished? Because it's not over yet. The events depicted took place two weeks into the lockdown. And the lockdown isn't over yet.

Is it finished? I think I'm missing a page or two!

She kicked him in the head (figuratively) and severed the ties that bind. He’s not taking her back, Philip Is damaged goods. Odds are Philip (If he lives) will take her in for cooking and sex, until they tier of one another.

The rest of this very good compact story is the rest of their lives

Chilleywilley

The plot was good, but her letter was a bit tedious in the reading. The ending was also a bit abrupt.

It was too short really to enjoy it, and felt rather flat. It might have Covid 19 as a theme in it, but it really didn't have much to do with it, other than Penny saying she couldn't stand being in lockdown with her husband or the reference to streaming services. It is otherwise a conventional story, the wife found the soulmate, it wasn't husband's fault, then she find out that her lover is a cheat *imagine that*, so we have a twist, and an incredibly stupid wife. We don't even get to see the husband's glee when he finds out she got what was coming or see her confront Phil, maybe stuff a pillow over her face.

Needs a follow up.

Hubby took the news well. I guess it is the British stiff upper lip, etc.

A few remarks...

The story read well. I didn't sense an excess of commas.

This does need a sequel. Penny has no place to go but back to Roger. There'd be an interesting quasi-confrontational scene. I could imagine Penny trying to put a good face on things, but Roger not going into the usual whys and how could yous. I'd like to see Roger play it cool. Plus with Prince Philip being such a wonderful alternative Roger's fidelity would look mighty unsettling for Penny. Heck, he'd have his daily counseling with Diane Penny could surreptitiously listen in on. Roger could really lay the I've loved her so much thick. Talk about a guilt trip! I think you could have a lot of fun with a sequel. I wouldn't go for the BTB though; it would be superfluous, but I'd like to see Philip get the virus.

I gave the story a five. I had a good time. I'll have an even better time reading a sequel.

Thanks,

Jedd Clampett

Roger didn't even need to burn the bitch. She did it to herself. Great ending. *****

Fun little story with a lot of local color. Or local colour, whatever. Well done, Matt.

And this is a succinct example of one. I don't see the need personally for a second chapter, as it's all laid out here, at least the parts that needed to be laid out.

5/5

Hubby was totally nonplussed with the letter and you stated he suspected she was fucking around. Why would he need to get therapy except he was fucking the therapist.

All rather disjointed. Aversge story.

Nice story. Would love to see a second chapter where Penny goes home, claiming the letter was an April Fool’s joke that she and Phil were going to play on him, but decided not to during the Pandemic. Fun ensues before hubby figures out she wasn’t joking.

This had the makings of a good story it had carried on,but left where it is it is a nothing story.

Matt-man, you have created a delightfully confused bitch as the main character. Clearly, most commenters believe Roger is the MC and fail to see the humor. We can imagine how completely Penny will be forced into "social distancing" in the future. Keep 'em comin'.

Good one. Would have been good for the April fools contest. Or maybe it was?

Good story, great concept, and execution. Yet I still feel that the ending was too abrupt and left the story dangling.

Where is the rest?

She left her husband...and what she got for it...was a surprise.....and the ending stinks for this story............

Shrewsbury is South of Birmingham,not North.

Birmingham is in the West Midlands, Shrewbury is the county town of Shropshire.

MattblackUK, your "amusing" is hilarious. Poor Penny is raving delusional. She tossed over her life for a serial cheater, but by God she left him with Netflix! And now she is on her way to the hospital to give Phillip the ole what-for. Many thanks for the chuckles this early morning. I start my day with a smile.

Keep 'em comin'.

That was a surprise!! A story situated in my local area!! Thank you very much 👍

Loved the vey unexpected twist, leaving her completely hanging.

Penny will now find out just how dreadful her life is.

Unfinished story, so much more to tell

3/5

Great story with a nice little chuckle at the end. Exiting to find a bilingual writer on Literotica!

A fine tale with a nice chuckle. Only problem is, what with it being in lockdown she wouldn't have been allowed to visit Phil in hospital.

Wheel of Fortune!

Wales: I'd like to buy a vowel.

Real example of karma, don’t even think of going back.

Another nice setup without an ending.

It needs to be finished

please btb

Here's an update of a sort. The Crown is no longer called The Crown. It'd been refurbished and is now called The Coleham Tap. But more expensive, though the food is as good as ever. Had a very tasty Neckoil IPA with my Cowboy burger!

wheres the rest of the damn story??????

That was a pretty stupid ending.

Oh good one, funny.

Again and Again I keep saying……

IF YOU CANT FINISH THE DAMN STORY DON’T POST IT!!!!

An unusual but quite satisfactory slice of life. Five stars!

Karma at its best.

Love a happy ending. Karma wins this one.

Instant Karma's gonna get you