All Comments on 'Pepe Pt. 01: Anna's Entanglements'

Wrong category. Her calling him"Daddy" doesn't make it incest, and there is no taboo involved.

Your grammar is horrible. You use less than a quarter of the periods and commas you need, and your paragraphing is equally horrid.

Almost every sentence is a run-on, if not every single one.

I found nothing in your writing to warrant a eating over one star.

"Anna was a young mexican American single mom age 25 living in Florida in a small Mexican American farm town. She was 5 ft 6 inches in height hazel eyes long brown dark hair but highlighted it with a blonde color perfectly tan skin like coffee with a good amount of cream in it. Her body was even better after pregnancy her tits grew from a size C to a DD eventually a size F cup."

Is this a joke? Have you heard of this thing called "punctuation"? Research it and a whole new world will open for you. I won't bother commenting on the C, DD, and F tits or the police-blotter physical description. Jesus...

Punctuation will make your writing readable. Having an idea and the courage to commit to paper is tough, but you've shown you have the ability to do it. Good luck!

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