All Comments on 'Peter'

Genuinely enjoyed the idea, but there was no thrill in the chase. A slower build up would have helped sell the premise much better.

I think you’d benefit from an editor - the spoken language is stilted and unnatural, there are constructural errors (take a look at the last paragraph, for instance), and there’s some evidence of inexperience (nobody who’s passionately engaged in a sexual encounter should count the exact number of minutes between orgasms).

Please keep writing, but look for some help to improve

Thanks!

No one speaks that way. Keep at it, but do some careful listening, and pay attention to the dialogue in stories you favor. The key to believable stories is believable dialogue, and it's often the hardest part of fiction writing.

Every Catholic Boy's dream

Giggles,

I am not a catholic but have heard many stories about the goings on within their ranks.

Female school teachers in general seem to be a loving lively bunch.

I know I enjoyed private time with my 7th grade teacher !

Looking at the authors Bio you would think he has better knowledge about properly writing a story .

An editor / proof reader would serve him well.