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Immediately, she was held securely as they reassured her and petted her while she regained control of her emotions. Tobin and Aden pulled Marley next to her and he eased on top of her, feeling her curls tickling the head of his cock. Tobin held him, positioning him at Kai's opening and the girl cried out as he slid through the curls and between her dripping labia. She was very tight and the pressure was intense before she began to part and his head popped into her. Immediately, he felt her barrier and he probed it gently.
"Jesus, Kai; you're a virgin," he said.
"I do not know this word," she moaned.
"You've never made love," Aden said.
"Only with women," Kai told them. "Men were not permitted in the temple. I am ready for a man. I am burning inside, Marley."
"Hold on then," he told her. "This is going to hurt a bit."
He rocked the head of his cock back and forth in her opening until he felt her hips begin to move in excitement and pushed through with a sharp thrust. Kai cried out and he froze in place. He felt Aden's hand push between them and rub Kai's little clit vigorously while Tobin kissed her lips, their tongues visibly dueling. When Kai's body began to move again, Marley slid into her with one slow, long push until their bodies were fully joined. Kai was still wincing a little as he began to stroke into her but the pleasure his cock was causing inside her quickly drove any thought of pain away. Her moans grew louder and longer until her small body shook and writhed beneath them, orgasms sweeping her away until she began to lose consciousness. There was a roaring in her ears and she felt a sudden heat in her loins as Marley continued to stroke into her. Her eyes began to roll up in her head and Tobin was alarmed.
"Stop, Marley; she's about to pass out. You can't come in her, anyway. I doubt she's on birth control. She probably doesn't even know what that is."
Marley pulled out and Aden quickly engulfed him while Tobin stroked him to orgasm. Aden took the first burst inside her mouth and then aimed him at Kai's heaving brown breasts. Ropes of white cum streaked her breasts and she watched, fascinated as the fluid crept down her breasts. She was recovering and she dipped her finger in Marley's cum. It rose tentatively to her lips and she tasted it.
Tobin kissed her deeply and looked into those black pools. "Was that what you wanted, Kai?"
"Oh, yes. It was everything I dreamed, and more," she breathed. "We must do this again, many times!"
Aden laughed. "We've created a monster. You're going to be fun, Kai. Let's go get in the hot tub."
This is part one of book three in the "Eye in the Sky" trilogy. I hope you enjoyed it and will read part II when it is posted. Randi."
- COMMENTS
Oldmantrucker24 days ago4-25-2024.... MORE PLZ.. ITS BEEN AWHILE,.. YEA I KNOW IT TAKES A TON OF TIME TO WRITE STORIES LIKE THIS. IM JUSTVAN INPAIENT OLD MAN THAT LIKES A GOOD STORY... LIKE THIS.. (and thanks 4 the ones uve alredy wrote).. Any way.. wère allbwaiting 4 the finish! And thks🙋🤷😁😁👍👍👍👍👍💯💯💯💯🌹
Anonymousabout 2 months agoIt is a bit strange but interesting. Resonates with other stories like 'the Artifact', and 'Hybrid'. (Sci-fantasy) I wonder how post-apocalyptic or post-climate change worlds would speculate about us on the cusp of earth shattering change. (Food for thought or a writer's event?)
AllNigher5 months agoI agree with the last anonymous.i love most of your work and got through this one but it just seemed... Not quite... Something. The writing was good, but I just lost interest in some parts. First time I've ever skimmed a part of one of your stories....
Bummer really... I was so excited when I saw something new here!
Anonymous5 months agoSince this turns out to be only Part One of a trilogy, I will withhold judgment, but as a standalone, this didn't really work for me, something I have never said of something by you, and I am not sure why. Part of it is because this is something of a 'throw in everything including the kitchen sink' type of story {erotica, love story, martial arts, political philosophy, science fiction?, etc.} Part of it is that I didn't find the Dolan's relationships plausible, an area that is generally one of your strengths. Part of it is because I wanted to argue with the conclusions of Marley's philosophy. A lot of it had to do with the science fiction elements, which you are getting a pass on because you have two more chances to resolve my objections.
I have been reading sci-fi for sixty-seven years, if you can count "The Spaceship Under the Apple Tree." {Actually, I guess "Tom Swift and His Flying Lab" was my first, which is of no interest to anyone.} I mention this only because I have read a LOT of s-f and fantasy and have some opinions about what works and what doesn't. There are two basic approaches to writing that type of story. The first is to just treat that world as perfectly natural and tell the story in that world with as little explanation as possible, only as much as necessary so that the reader doesn't get lost. A perfect example of that is "The Demon Queen of Hell," one of the best stories on this site by an outstanding author. That is more fantasy than s-f, but the principle holds. The other way is to build up the world of the story with explanations to create the elements that are needed to fashion a new world in the reader's mind along with exposition as to how these differences came to exist. This method is a lot more demanding on the writer. In the first method, the reader just suspends belief and immerses himself in the new world. There is no conscious evaluation of plausibility as long as the story is sufficiently entertaining to allow the reader to be carried along. In the second method, the reader's conscious mind will evaluate the explanation in the process of building a mental picture.
In the case of this story, the stakes have been raised because you have introduced suspense/mystery and that means that the s-f elements not only need to carry the story, but they also need to justify the suspense. You have elements of magic and two different sets of aliens who demonstrate a real mix of primitivity and the sophistication to construct world portals. Seemingly, the 'demon people' are the ones with the knowledge to build the portals but encourage cannibalism. {I am guessing that Marley's diatribe will connect that in some way.} At the same time, Kia's people are relatively unsophisticated but have found a way to hold off the 'demon people.' My understanding to this point is that they are not free to use the portals because it leaves them vulnerable, but Kia has knowledge of any number of languages. The cannibals seem to be free to travel, however. I guess the blue glow will be explained at some point. If the 'demon people' were able to conquer the 'people' so quickly {Was it by forming a cult or dining?}, why did they stop? The Olmecs/Toltecs were not that far away. {My history isn't good enough to remember which would have been contemporaries and I am too lazy to google it.} What happened to the 'demon people' once they had conquered? I assume that the one who knifed Marley had just transferred in and hadn't been hiding in the desert all that time. If I think about it, I could probably come up with more questions, but I will stop there. When I had only on {Lit} page to go, I was sure there wasn't enough story left to satisfy me, but you saved it with the trilogy declaration.
I will await the next two parts.
Crusader2355 months agoLove the story and the Maybe history of the southwest. But IMHO the sex got in the way. Five stars still earned.
SouthernCrossfire6 months agoCongratulations on story 100 and the book, Randi. It's a very interesting (and different) plot line so I'm looking forward to seeing where it goes from here (and finding books 1 and 2). Thanks, too, for organizing the challenge and for the invitation. 5* for this one.
Phxray546 months agoAnother 5 star? And now I have to add it too my 2nd reading list. You’re making this too much work for me. Thanks Randi!
