All Comments on 'Peyton and Mark Pt. 01'

Very enjoyable story and I am hoping you make it a series. Peyton and Jen have a lot of potential fun ahead.

Great intro and build up can't wait to read the next chapter..

Holy F keep writing, it is like the air was knocked out of my lungs when I came to the end, I needed more.

Thank you for the awesome comments. I'm so glad yall are enjoying.

Hot damn, this is good stuff. I do hope you'll be giving us more, I'd be happy to offer suggestions if you're looking for inspiration.

Gets hard when the same word is used in almost every sentence. The start was full of 'they'. After just a few lines all I could see was the word they. Good idea to use different words or sentence structure to reduce repetitions.

Lovely story... can't wait to read more.

Great story ! Well written ! Having two daughters myself, I can relate. It’s a story that’s played out thousands of times every day across this land. It’s a completely normal response from our sexual urges and sexuality. Good job ! I hope you keep writing about it.