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by Acal

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AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago

Good premise, but i would expand. It is rushed, reoccurring connection words give too much repetition, and the scenes can be played out longer. You have and awesome story here. I would love to see it drawn out and given more detail. Nice job though, don't stop!!!

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