All Comments on 'Phoenix Son Pt. 01'

bad

just bad

very bad

This is so well written

COINCIDENCE OR AUDACITY ??

Been following your stories with the unmissable comments, and the timing of this just surprised me.

Maybe it's just the TITLE but still.

Was this another casual submission or a reply to somebody ?

just wonderful

you write so well bruce

Super hot

Hate to disagree with some comments BUT, this is not that we'll written.

Thinking in a language other than English, then writing your thought is quite difficult. In the case of this story the results includes being too wordy and a lot of incorrect punctuation.

The excess words come as a result of thinking the story in a different language, then writing in the style of that language.

The punctuation errors are, to my belief, simply not thinking in English. Pauses in English deserve punctuation, change of thought requires punctuation.

The more you read in English, the more you write in English, this will become more natural for/to you.

I encourage you to read more in Literotica.com to become more attuned to the flow of thoughts in writhen words AND the use of punctuation in those written texts.

Fantastic. When can we expect the next episode?

Study punctuation, especially capital letters.

when part 2 comming?

please post part 2?

Sir I love your story it touched me to the soul i really want a part 2 of this story sir please release it please sir.