All Comments on 'Phonepoint Ch. 02'

This was pretty good. That plus her orgasm.

Rape is never about sex, it’s about power and control, two things you alluded to but then you added the orgasm to heighten her humiliation.

The problem with that is women who are being raped won’t orgasm. At least, not he ones I know of. Cumming is almost as much mental as it is physical and imagine pure being hurt, would you get off in spite f being whipped? Not likely.

If you’re going to rape, then accept that the women won’t cum. Tears, yes, pain from being fucked dry, you bet; but not likely orgasms.

Loved it hope this gets another chapter!

waiting for the third part and i like how he is making emily obey giving her not option and a fully 24 hrs of control

I mostly enjoyed the story, but there were some things that bugged me.

At first, no one would go through such blackmail, not even that nightmare convinced me of Emily's reasoning. Second would be the typos - there were just too many to go smoothly through the story and it broke the atmosphere of total control, which was otherwise very well written.

Honestly I don't feel like there was much reluctance on Emily's part - she succumbed almost immediately, only saying she'll find a way out, when one is beaming straight into her face which is the police.

That would be if I wanted a realistic story, but since it is a fantasy, it's pretty well written. I love many of the ideas used, such as the morning photos (but please let her wake up first), the morning run is an awful thing if it's there to get her in shape, but great if it works as a way to put her in specific scenarios and spice things up a little.

The 24/7 control is amazing concept, but when one thinks of it, it's surrealistic. They both have things to do during the day, both have certain schedules, he should be attending school etc. I would suggest to make more tension through answer delays here and then, make Emily uncertain of her grounds.

I know I might sound like an awful critic, but I really enjoyed most of the story and am looking forward to where it will lead us to. Especially I am interested in the other girls who might join the fun.

~Sal

I’m really enjoying it so far! Few suggestions:

X Maybe throw in some orgasm control? Ie she’s not allowed to cum without permission. Could have her edge too.

X More rules she has to comply too.

Keep it going can’t wait for the next update

I feel like the blackmail wasn't sufficient. Emily would probably have rather gone to the police than go through all this. However,the story itself is really hot, and I absolutely LOVE the 24/7 aspect.

I want to read the next chapter. What I really want is to be him.

Noah should seriously consider having a clitoridectomy performed on Emily. This would cement her slavery forever.

Great story can't wait for the next part!

Great story

For people asking about the next part, its in the works. ive had about 2/3 of it done for months now, but im a bit stagnant. i know this isnt that helpfull, but it could be a week or it could be a few months. ill churn out another few parts eventually though

Can't wait to read more!

please are thre any updates regarding the next chapters?

Any updates on this?

Can't wait to read more!

Great story

Hope you are going to continue this series and we see Emily and the other friends in the group totally controlled by N

More rope bondage and orgasm control, forced orgasm and denial

Will there ever be a part 3?

Probably some day. It's been mostly written for years now, but I've kinda run out of steam for the story. I bit off too big a story too early here, and my interest in it has kinda fizzled. The thing with writing erotica, at least for me, is I get this intense urge to write a story, and I fly through it, but if I don't finish before that wears off, it's very hard to get motivated. So yes, probably a part three. I currently have a 10k draft sitting on my computer. I'll probably finish it at some point. Honestly though I think 2khr parts 2 and 3 might come first. Thanks for your continued interest in this story, it really does mean a lot to me, and makes me much more likely to revisit this

this story is great but you should do more of 2khr. That's one of the best things I've read on LE... congrats. Great storytelling

Can't wait to read more of your work!

don't stop