by lucky-E-leven
I was very excited to see a new submission by you. You are one of the best writers on the site; able to convey so much with so little.
"There are no words in any language that could convey my feelings..."
so proud that you got a story up after a dry spell. you should always write, even when you've not the time.
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has been mentioned in today's Author's Hangout New Story Review Thread.
Beautifully told. The usually hidden side of ecstasy, that of watching your lover looking at you knowing you're watching her in her most vulnerable self in total surrender, is a joy I suspect few know. May they all be as inspired by your story as I was held in its telling. Magnificent, Lucky! The quintessential short lesbian story!
Oh, hmmm, moving, beautiful, beautiful, beautiful, beautiful, and beautiful. I want my lover to describe me like that; to want me like that; to need me like that; to say it like that...everytime. Oh goodness, exquisite, beautiful, beautiful.
You did it to me again, Lucky. Great story, great characters and and hot sex. Nice job.
I'm glad to see you writing again, hon...and writing as beautifully as ever, if not better! It's been a long time since I saw such raw emotion described so visibly. GOD... sometimes you make me wish I were a woman! We men seem far too coarse and vulgar sometimes! lol Seriously, nice job. ~Woody
Welcome back, Lucky! Wow! This story made my glasses steam up, it was so hot and raw! Incredibly beautiful and erotic. Congratulations on your triumphant return.
This could be the start of a great series... More photographs please...
A lovely story. It caught a beautiful moment so exquisitely.
I was fascinated by the change in the central character as well, the way her barriers were broken and the passion that exploded forth.
Very nice work.
I have so very much missed your writing, welcome back!
This was so worth the wait! Beautifully crafted!
Abs.
That was beautiful. You did a superb job of painting real people and not the caricatures I so often read here. Your words were poetic, lyrical and very moving. What passion!
God that was so hot! I love reading about two women who are in love. Fantasticly written.
Welcome back after your long absence. Hope you'll be contributing more stories soon. Your writing is both evocative and sensual. A definite cut above many of the submissions on this site. Very well done!
It was incredible! I felt completely enveloped in the rich, vivid imagery. I'm definitely going to have to read more of this person's work!
I cant breathe!
that was phenominal! i love how Natalie describes the photo, and then how she makes those suspected barriers around Asia fall. I love how Asia was scared abou letting go. Two characters in mad love, the story was made from the point i realised that. Fantastic.
It's addictive, your writing. I've come back to it after a long time. I don't know why I keep away. Oh ok wait, I do know. It is so pure, so lovely, so loving and so emotional that it creeps into places in my heart that I want to keep closed. I could so totally understand the vulnerability in Asia. Sigh. Your writing is a reflection of the wonderful person you are. Keep writing.
That was an absolutely amazing story. It was so beautifully written. That kinda messes up real life because I know that will never happen ; )
Beautifully written. The characters were very real and the passion irresistable. Please keep writing!
yet has more emotion than many of the stories on here. Definite 5 stars from me!
You display beautiful creative writing skills and so your story (although too short) is a very special reading experience
Natalie is dangerous. She wants ALL of Asia. Asia’s gonna fall hard hard hard. Harder than even she predicted
Greedy Love. Yum.
I SEE YOU, BOTH OF YOU. THRU EVERY WORD I FELT EVERY TOUCH, EVERY TREMBLE AND ORGASMIC AFTERSHOCK. I HAVE A PHOTOGRAPHIC MEMORY OF THIS STORY.
Happy Reading
I can’t believe that was only one page. It was beautiful. Thank you for sharing.
I see that readers are still commenting on your beautifully erotic writing (as recent as 4 months ago), so I simply want to add my reaction. I discovered “Joyride” - not sure how - and loved it. This piece is beyond rapture - so intense, such love, so erotic. I suspect that we will not see another one of your wonderfully crafted stories on this site again for whatever reason, but I can still hope.