All Comments on 'Photographing Jenny'

Super story, really liked the way it was written.

Not too sure about four photographers and the model with her husband in a caravan having enough room to do anything. Cannot see that some of the situations could have been possible.

Good quality writing like this deserves better attention to plot detail. The first picture won a competition at a club that clearly had more than four membere.

So much potential in this tale the rushed end with the wife suddenly fucking four guys is in no way realistic and sadly dissapointing.

Please re-write with a less rushed ending, the whole sexy ending can be further developed to great advantage.

it is actually a true story and happened as is, club competition was between 5 clubs scattered round a rural area - the caravans were residential double vans, almost like a small bungalow - didn't mean to 'rush' the end but wanted to keep this story as close to true as possible

I will post others that will be fictional but based roughly around truth - that is if you would like to read others - let me know

I enjoyed the build up of there story, with Jenny slowly becoming more comfortable, but the mad rush of the last paragraph was disappointing. Would have preferred a slower and more detailed description of the after shoot session.

that you want to keep it close to the truth. what the others ment was that when you wrote "During the night ....." you could have used a couple more lines than just 15 and being curious what happened after that night ??

good written just a bit short.

Thank you for your comments I now understand where you were going.

My wife sat for my photography club but they were never bright enough to ask her to strip off at all. Both she and I at the time would have been happy with that.

We had other adventures as you will see from my submissions.

Well done, like your style.

Appreciate all the comments and will take them onboard this is the first time I have ever written anything like this

Great Story and I hope Jenny continued her modeling career.