by werewoman
finally she saved him by going to the hospital and saying what she did ,now she needs to get her weight up and get danny more help with his drinking. needs a sequeal
All I can say is we fans here at this site do not deserve a writer of your caliber; but I am damn pleased we have been blessed with at least one of your stories so far. I hope that you continue to bless us with more of your works.
I give such high praise because most stories here are always so detailed about the sex and even might have a decent story but they almost all have one flaw. The characters in the stories only ever feel like characters. What you have done in this series is turn even the most trivial character into a person. That is something you don't even see as often as you should in paid authors.
You have a gift for writing that you can easily see goes beyond just erotica. I say again thank you for giving us this story I just hope you will come back and give us more gifts.
I want to say one thing about what I read from others as the biggest problem with the series... That being not enough per post or per page/chapter. To me at least it doesn't matter how many posts it takes to get a story out or how it is broken down. What makes a good read is how that story is framed and paced and you nailed that. For those that wanted more per posting or more words per page/chapter just have a bit of patience and wait for the writer to get more posts out to satisfy your needs. Unless in reality your complaints ARE about the pacing which then I have to vehemently disagree. When Danny was in the hospital I knew before he asked for his mom he would and that she would be there in the shadows already yet goose bumps my friend, goose bumps all over.
I won't add any more to what had been said already.
But I will voice that you simply musty write more stories for us to enjoy.
This is what we come to Literotica for, and you certainly have proven you belong here.
Thank you for this story, and thanks in advance for anything more coming from you in future.
This useless fucking weasel baby is no better then Steve ever was,, maybe even worse
Supposedly he is a big strapping kid ,, yet he was to fucking useless to stand up for his mother during all the abuse, all he could do was smell a cunt within a mile of him,, he had to have it,, now he wants to OWN her just like Steve did,, my guess is he liked how pathetic she looked beat to shit and covered in bruises
From the time I was 5 years old ,, i used to stand between my mother and father anytime they argued
He never hit her that I am aware of,,i would have taken any beating he wanted to give me to stop him from hitting a women,, any women, and this fucking coward stood by and let it happen
Good luck to the stupid useless whore for taking it back,, she will be beat just like she is used to
The entire series is well written, cohesive in its connection between the chapters and compelling. The end two chapters could be a little more creative but you delivered a lot of material over a very short period of time. Take a break, review and edit and resubmit. Also, a last closure chapter with very descriptive sexual interaction and perhaps a resulting pregnancy or adoption would be satisfying to this audience.
I could not jerk off to any part of this story. I was just too sad most of the time by the time we got to any of the nice bits. The story did draw me in and once I got past the third part I couldn't put it down. My only wish would be a second book of their life together full of happiness and sex lol. Overall great read.
Although I enjoyed this story, breaking it up into two page sections made reading it more cumbersome. Just a thought.
Liked the story only such a weak character like Danny.. sigh frustrating to say the least. I cant kill a bird/Steve(well..steve i could probably do if i had to watch him beat the women i love for years on end) as well but that doesnt mean there is a chance in hell id let her stay in that situation WITHOUT DOING SOMETHING about it. The way he hell apart with drinking is really stupid.. i mean ok heartbreak hurts but.. come on.
This story is very worth your time. It is rare when something is posted here that is this worth reading. Well written, great character development and story continuity. I really enjoyed it and thanks for the entertainment.
This was an awesome story loved every chapter loved the ending though I would have loved for him to give his mother a child!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Like I said before I just came across this story although you wrote it a long time ago. I was glad she went back to her son, you should have wrote one more chapter with them being together and maybe she becomes pregnant with his child and they continue to have a family together. Gave it 5 stars?????
Loved the story but you should have continued with them being together and her having his children 5 stars