Pick You Up

A really good story. Thoroughly enjoyable with just the right amount of kleenex at the end.

What a wonderful story.

Great story. Gave it a five. Only one real problem. NEVER, EVER fire a black shell from a real firearm into someone. It WILL kill them. Especially if fired into the head. Not just burn hair and scalp! Unfortunately, movies have made people think it is safe. One Hollywood actor actually blew his brains out with a blank in a pistol when playing around and thinking it would only make noise. If he had actually fired that blank into the creatures head it would have blown up.

That opening reminiscing scene, christ, that's haunting stuff. Hard to believe people can do that to people they supposedly care about. To beat a women to within an inch of her life, and then abuse your own children... I'm surprised he let that monster live. No wonder he quit. Seeing stuff like that is just too much for most men.

Honestly he shouldn't have let that scumbag live at the end. His next victim certainly won't thank him for it (and yes there will almost certainly be one with people like this because people like him cannot change their nature). He should have just ended the problem permanently right there. But you can't do that - that's murder! Yes, it is. You can label it however you wish. But sometimes a choice has to be made whether to let an uncaring monster like that live and risk potentially harming god knows how many people, or just do the sensible thing and end it. I know which choice I would make and I wouldn't lose any sleep over it.

"We'd long agreed that we'd try anything except introducing other people. We loved each other far too much to even contemplate doing such a thing." This right here is something so many authors should bear in mind when writing any kind of romance story, especially the incest-based ones as the connection in those is often far deeper and thus makes even less sense when sharing happens.

The point is marking justice yourself is not good but this is true this kind of situation is hard to deal with. This story will certainly help many ladies that have met bad guys. There is hope. Just need to see it when in the darkness.

Maybe a couple of little plot glitches but overall totally enjoyable.

What a great, great story. Love it. AAAAAA++++++

Fantastic story, anticipated the confrontation with Jack and happily, he wasn’t killed. But, discharging a blank shell near the back of the head would result in burnt hair and burnt and broken scalp at a minimum. The force could knock a person unconscious and even cause a concussion. At worst it could cause death even though there is no bullet. The force of the blast certainly would knock the person down or as you wrote, into the grave but the result most likely would have prevented Jack from carrying on a conversation or spend three days hiking back to civilization.

heart warming story but several plot errors not really worth mentioning. thanks for writing this

They're not clips, they're magazines. Great story otherwise.

Like Overcritical said, good heart-warming story. But definitely do not use blanks in the way Mark did. They are still very dangerous.

Perfect!!

Certainly a very schmaltzy story with nothing but good things happening. I must disclose a huge mistake that the author made although I'm sure almost no one caught it. Blank shells do not have a metal bullet or slug on the projectile end of the round. But they do have a paper wad to hold in the powder and if the "blank" is held anywhere near a person when the shot is fired the paper wad is shot out at very high speed for a short distance. If Mark had held the gun at the head of the villain and fired it he would have inflicted serious injury even though he was firing blanks. Still a heart-worming 5*

very nice story with a very difficult subject and more common than we think.

5⭐

Thanks for sharing your story.

Her ex-husband is very like that he didn’t meet up with an Eastern Brown snake as he was tracking out of the outback!