All Comments on 'Picking up my Stepsister'

Great story. I hope there are more chapters to cum.

5 stars. Darn good story. Keep on writing, please.

PROOF READ!!!!!!

2*

OMG so looking forward to this continuing tale. Thanks for sharing...

I started to read it but the bad spelling and bad grammar, along with the bad punctuation which makes it hard to read, just got too much for me and I bailed out.

Suggestion to the author: next time run it through some spelling and grammar checking software before submitting. No one would suggest you change your writing style; just make it comprehensible. Best wishes to you.

I liked it so far!

Hope pt2 is posted soon!

It pisses me off when people say this is wrong that is wrong but all they say is get a proofreader or some shit

Maybe this will help

1--read it backwards, it will help you spot all sorts of errors. This is a technique professional proofreaders use

2-- read it again to see if you have changed the story by your correction and fix that

3 send it

Thank you all for your comments and advice. Also I do plan on a few more chapters it just might take some time since I have a busy schedule.

I thought the story was very enjoyable. Although there were a few very minor issues with proofreading, punctuation...come on people....it does not "wreck" the story. I hope to see more chapters to what, I think, is a very agreeable start!

Well as far as I am concerned this story is an excellent start for a great series. The storyline is solid and so far the characters are believable. Hope the author won't take too long for a 2nd chapter. Well done 5 stars

fun story.

Poor proofreading. Wrong category (18yr old with a 24yr old is not mature). Tired old clichés (18yr old with massive dick, comes gallons and is the best ever at oral).

For this first chapter...(4) stars...

You start, you stop...start...stop...foes on like that, throwing off the tempo of the reading.

So the MC has a large penis...happens a lot in these stories; like others, I am NOT impressed with the description of an above-average dick...the better part of the story is MC knows how to please a woman COMPLETELY...foreplay is an art, one that TOO MANY MEN ignore, much to the chagrin of their partners, and their own loss!!

I AM reading the next chapter, see where this goes/how sister reacts to MC's abilities...

Hope it "gets better"...