All Comments on 'Pity (The Pickup-Artist)'

Please keep writing. Like to see how mean she can be to him.

Yummy. I hope you continue to write and post here. I’m generally not a Femdom kinda girl, but you could change my mind.

Excellent, super hot if you had pictures. Can't wait for pt 2

This was so well written! I loved the pacing and rhythm of your prose. And it was sexy as hell.

Now that was a long, luxurious, and expertly controlled handjob of a story, ES. Only what came out when you were finished was ...redemption. Hats off. Welcome and DO keep writing!

~P.M.

Loved every word. Great writing.

Agree with everyone.

Really well done.

Please keep writing!

Great writing. I loved it. Looking forward to more.

Loved the girl power and wished it had all been real. We need more stories where she gets what she wants and he does what he’s told. Thank you for the story of the one night stand that I only dream about.

No sequel needed for this story but please, please keep on writing!

That is some A-grade writing right there: sexy, creative, highly original, funny, surprising, thoughtful, and beautifully, imaginatively written. And for a first story??!!! Whoa, look out! 🤯 I will be watching with great enthusiasm for whatever unfurls next. 👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏 5 Stars...easy!