by stalford
Very nice!! I didn't want it to end, so give us more!! I can't wait to see what happens! Keep up the wonderful work, I can definitely see a future in literature for you! MORE, MORE!!!!!!!!
I love your writing style and descriptions of mood and feelings. I think,however that this story would benefit by being written in the first person. What does anyone else think? The story is definitely told from Sam's perspective - even her thoughts are included. It would read so nice as "I put my coat around her shoulders" rather than "Sam put her coat around her shoulders."
Thanks. by the way!
Marvelous start to a literary life. Two at once Poetry and Prose. More, please.
Great beginning, I enjoyed reading this & I hope you will write more parts to this story.