by jackvick
This is such a good story. Who cares if someone says the ending was lacking. Listen, She has the whole summer alone. There's got to be more. I know you can do it.
This is a nice, funny story. It is believable, flows well, and is a manageable length. The stoners internal dialogue adds greatly to the story.
My only complaint is the money shot. There are only two appropriate places to come: in her pussy or in her mouth.
That was some funny - and hot - stuff! Loved the goofy stoner internal dialogue.
I hope you're working on more.
...and laugh-out-loud stoney details (loved the bit about Jack knowing that Carolyn spelled "whacky" with an "h" based on the way she said it). Very nicely done!
But I must say, from here in the UK, it seems to read as very British in style. And you can't have a better compliment that that.
I felt that this story was told in a ridiculous yet somehow believable manner. Yes the ending left something to be desired but it was realistic and enjoyable. The other stories on this site where some poor bastard has had a year long drought and somehow magically manages to last 1/2 an hour are preposterous!! I swear I have totally been in this guys shoes. The constant self-status updates ROFL, (ie.. is this whats really going on; or am I just really high right now)
...pulled on a bong or three.If you could have come up with a clever ending it would be a classic, but the read was quite amusing and enjoyable.Thanks.