All Comments on 'Power of the Mind Ch. 03-05'

Your story has all the makings of a good book. I can't wait to see how many more women that Alex takes a liking to. Maybe even a nother sister or two.

I am thoroughly enjoying the story, but perhaps you should know for the sake of accuracy, you cannot transfer an aristocratic title i.e. an earldom, for money. Pedantic I know but there you are.

I am really getting into this story. I hope there is plenty more to come.

The writting is better than the first two chapter but it feels a different story now. Alex enslaved Angela and now he wants to seduce her? You should have him seduce another woman and keep Angela as a toy. Another problem is you bring stories without preparation. Alex makes a few phone calls and "boom" he becomes earl. It's confiusing. You jump from one thing to another without transition and you don't build the subject, you make it appears.

Take your time to make a consistent story. You bring us to the end of the road but don't show us the way.

You're getting better but it's not quite alright yet.

This is a very good story please continue it.

This is good I can't wait till the next chapter

Dam can't wait for the rest.

You ever gonna finish this story???