All Comments on 'Practice Makes Perfect'

How does a story so poorly written show an average score of 4.08? Hopefully, my vote will serve to rectify that.

I'm sorry to hear you didn't like my story, worshipper622. There's no denying that I'm very inexperienced when it comes to writing, but I was hoping this wouldn't be so bad that it encouraged comments like yours.

If you have any constructive criticism, I'm welcoming that with open arms.

We all could use friends like this.

It needs more set-up. And more details in its progression.

What if she is only pretending to be practicing?

She actually wants Him!

Great opportunity to establish and DEMONSTRATE their existing relationship.

(Don't tell it, SHOW it...kinda thing.)

And during its progression, she keeps asking him how THIS feels?

And how about THIS? Do you like it when I _________?

I read that guys like this...Am I doing it right?

You get the idea...write it!

Read what KC had to say and if you practice what he is a saying your next story will be 75% better.! In a story we want to be able to feel like that we are there by the writer telling it like it is.! I gave it a '3' as I liked it but it could have been much better but I also know it was your 1st one so that you can only get better from now on.* Thx.

not bad for your 1st time,it is a good read, it just needs more detail.you had some errors, but you can get a proofreader to check your story out before you post, also you can get a spell checker on -line called (Tiny spell checker) it is a free software you can download at: filehippo.com very good site for free software virus free downloads. i been using them for years and not had any problems with them. keep writing. your next story will be even better

worshipper622 does not know what he talking about

Fun read, was hoping she was referring him, as being the boyfriend.

Don’t left the crude, rude, tackless review discourage you to write more.