All Comments on 'Pretend For Me Ch. 01'

To start with, 'fantasie' is actually spelled FANTASY, you need an editor badly, you have promise though.

after ten years they love each other or maybe they just don`t know it. a start

of a tale but open ending so far. maybe he wants to move ahead with her

as a lover and wife. you can go many ways from where you are at now.

As the previous guy said, you have many ways to flow the story. Just keep up the rhythm and good luck writer.

Your execution could use some work in the details, though. As one commenter said previously, you should try to find an editor: While your story seems pretty good, there's some weaknesses in language and timeline that might have been caught by another person looking over it. Apart from that, I look forward to reading how this goes on.

It's a good story so far, but you do have some typos, and as other users commented, there are many ways you can look at the ending. Other than that, I'm looking forward to reading the second chapter.

Continue pls...

...he is 30 and not married? His siblings should all be 18 or over so whats the point of his Aunts interference?

The premise is good but he comes off to me as a pushy and manipulative. Those are not qualities I want to see in a romantic lead.

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