by CAP811
I actually cried out in despair at end and my sister came running asking me what was wrong - i want more and there isn't any! She rolled her eyes and left.
This story has a Pygmalion-like charm. The fact that the mouse turned into an angel was like the cherry on the sundae.
Very nicely done. There was a bit of a disconnect between the kiss on Friday night and what happened on Sunday. I quickly got back in the story, however, and enjoyed it to the finish.
Good characterization, great story flow tender, warm, affectionate older-man and younger-woman plot. Narrative drew the reader into your story. I felt immersed and engrossed. Please write more.
rashi शुक्ल ने मुझे ऐसा नहीं कह सकते में ध्यान देने वाला एक एलेवेटर पर छड़ी rutgers है ... । मॅँ मेरे शिश्न ने उसके मुख और उसने उसके चेहरे पर शुक्राणु डाल दिया जाता है । अगर वह चाहती है कि चित्र, उन्हें वेतन!