All Comments on 'Prom Night'

Spoiled by the same outcome being discovered just as he was about to cum.

Did his sister get pregnant or was she on the pill

More details needed

Becky getting pregnant was irrelevant to the story. Hence the title called Prom Night. But thank you for commenting that it was a good plot.

Very hot! A threesome for a followup chapter maybe?

A little confusing, but still good. You assumed Becky was a virgin, but I guess she was not. Who did she fuck?

Who did Bonnie and Becky "PRACTICE" FUCKING ?

Loved him getting a FULL FUCKING FROM HIS SISTER.

Quick thinking making Mom think it was Bonnie in the basement fucking her son.

Why no birth control pills?

Let me answer your question one by one .1. If Ricky thought Becky was a virgin, then found out she wasn't, how would he know who she had sex with. And why would she tell? 2. Becky and Bonnie practicing sex with a guy was irrelevant to the story. Ricky was horny and wanted to fuck. Not ask a 1001 questions 3. Not every high school girl is on the pill. Remember. Becky was thought to be a virgin. So why be on the pill? Bonnie's mom was a whore. So why should she be on the pill? I hope that made it less confusing. And I agree. It was an awesome story!!

Loved it, thank you.

As for some of the "critiques" concerning *details and unanswered lingering questions* for fs, can't a story be complete without nitpicking, juvenile, irrelevant details? Fill them in yourself, it is your imagination that's fueling your desire for this genre`.

Other than that, it is well written in my opinion. I don't give out 5 stars very often, however, I also don't comment a lot, but in this case I had to. This is good writing. Character development is well executed, and it is similar to what a lot of people can relate to at their senior prom. Maybe not all of it, but portions? Hence the idea that this IS fiction.

I enjoyed reading this story along with the others you wrote. You are quite good at telling rather short stories which do a surprisingly good job at bringing to life to the characters. As I was reading this story I began to be drawn in and let my imagination flow to where this story could have gone. Of course, this story was destined to go down the path of your choosing, yet after it was done I was left needing something more, and all I could think about is that there could have been so much more to this story that would have made it really come alive. I felt compelled to offer you a little free advice, lol, for whatever it’s worth, take it or leave it as you see fit.

I believe that if you truly want to deliver a story to the readers that blows them away and takes them on a magic carpet ride into your imagination then you might want to do the following two things:

1) Have an editor give you a few helpful tips on word choice and sentence structure. Occasionally I had to stop and reword a sentence in order for it to make sense. This is not a huge deal but it does interrupt the flow of the story. If you could clean that up your readers will easily get lost in your world.

2) Your stories tend to be on the short side, and it is my belief that if you really want readers to become fully invested in the stories you write you may want to consider delving deeper. I say this not as a critic, but as a fan who would love see you write a story that truly explores the details of the erotic works of fiction you so obviously enjoy writing.

Best of luck in your future writing ventures from FatChick4Erotica!

This one was just like old times, my only problem back then was, I had an old VW . An anyone knows a 1952 VW has almost no back seat. You did a good job,keep it up...THANKS

Another great story, involving incest and younger kids. Thanks!!

I came across this again and it still holds up. I wanted so much more but I thought it was excellent writing.

There's nothing wrong with a four page story. I was in the mood for something like this. Good job.