All Comments on 'Protected Pt. 02'

Another good chapter. I think you've given the game away who's behind it but I might be wrong! With the RV at night though, they could just set it on fire and kill them when they come out, no need to go in! Anyway looking forward to the next chapter.

Really good, you’re ramping up the tension and the way you’ve written it conveys exactly what the characters are feeling, I suspect I’ve worked out the plot and the “bad guy”, but that doesn’t detract from the enjoyment of reading at all, probably just compels me to carry on and see if I’m right! Five stars all the way so far from me and I’m looking forward to the next chapter! Thanks for writing and posting, cheers Ppfzz.

Did I see a red flag when the husband of Willow's aunt was mentioned...

Good chapter!

5

Good suspense. i like that there's some disagreement over who the brothers suspect. I also like how there is a little romantic tension, but it's not unrealistically absurd. I think the brothers are wanting to set up a "perimeter" not a "parameter".

This is very good, please keep going with it.

Nutty.

A great story. Really looking forward to reading more of this. Bravos.

Perimeter = edge. Parameter = a value such as horsepower or money available

I am enjoying this - I mean, I am really enjoying this. Top writing - Onwards!

Great story, someone wants them to think it’s the Cartel behind all this.

I don’t buy it.

5/5