by freefantasies
Nice idea, poor writing. Breasts as 'balloons of meat'? Per-leez! That's gross.
It could be good but... is this really a lesbian story? And how could you mix up ass with pussy? Really?
really good idea but not your best story. I was hoping for a revival of the figure of Jasmine and Shahrazad, but instead I collided with something else. Hope you want to expand on the old stories or keep that tone.
Loved the seduction of both parties, the entire way you write, thank you many times over, would love to have a beer with you. Please continue writing, exercise your mind, and I will assist in any way that I can.