All Comments on 'Punished by the Professor'

That was awesome! Can't wait for the next part!

You have some serious writing skills. Absolutely loved how the emotion of pleasure was expressed throughout this piece. Great job!

" lost my V- card just 3 months ago, at 20."

"lost my virginity just three months ago, at the age of twenty."

Not everyone in the world knows what "V-card" means and you need to write out numbers under 100.

"Continuing, he points out " He points out what?

I stammer, I stutter, he proposes, he smirks, he quips, he sings, he teases, I pant, he growls, I coo, etc etc. Try using he/she said.

"I wither like a tickled kitten." Do you mean "writhe"?

"his handS reach my panties" " He rubs his handS with expertise" He's driving with no hands on the wheel?

"He sweeps me up AND carries me across the hall. I rest my head against his arms" I can't picture how her head is resting on both his arms when he's carrying her? You need to think about if what you describe is physically possible.

" He turns left leading us into a dimly lit room " How can he lead her if he's carrying her? Should be, "He turns left into a dimly lit room."

" He must spend hours in the gym, I wonder " There's no question there, so "wonder" doesn't fit.

"Stand-up" - no dash.

"He gets a pack of tissues and comes to clean my back.

"Can you leave them there? I like how they feel(COMMA)" I say" - What this says is that she wants him to leave the tissues ("them") on her back. Is that what you mean? Also, you need to punctuate dialogue correctly.

You certainly have potential to write hot smut and good characterizations. Take your time, check your work for errors (reading it out loud sometimes helps) or get an editor. Look up what you aren't sure about, like punctuation and definitions of words. This is meant to be helpful. Good luck!

i wish i had this kinda relationship with bf, it is only happening in my imagination.