by PDumbledore
Really, Hades? If you don't like incest, wtf are you doing in this part of literotica? Also, don't talk shit. That's not what comments are for.
this is fuckin sick what the hell is wrong with people in this world like wtf? seriously omg this story makes me wanna shoot myself
I liked it better, but it is still lacking the personal feeling that makes your readers feel it too. Makes them desirous to be one of the characters, not just a voyeur of it.
Another hot chapter Can't wait to read more. Yeah I agree with the other poster - no sex with the parents - keep it to the cute sexy siblings.
.. and it's good there was no rape performed by an old and hairy father. I am afraid to read on the next chapters, as I already know where it is getting.
i have a twin sister...and we wish there was another pair of us because of these stories
i wish i had a couple of sisters like you guys.....keep it up if you can...
This is great reading with all 4 sibling in the act and their love for one another their thrill of changing making it a lot of fun for all.
I think u should leave the parents out but perhaps make connection with the boys
I was just wondering if you did any HP fanfiction writing. I was only asking for your penname of P Dumbledore.
...that we're going to learn more about the purpose of the shower, now.
I definately think the parents should get involved in the story. Sexually, I hope. It would reall put pazz in the story. The father doing the girls, too bad they (girls) weren't a little younger. Keep up the good work
its an awsome story and i guess you have to get the parents into it anyway since their there now Also you already kinda set it up for the parents to get into it the shower has 6 heads and the mom suggested them all going to the prom together and they left them alone for the weekend its a set up we all know where you leading the story so just take it there and make it interesting plus you should tripple team the chicks thats awsome
What happens next? I really got into the story. i really want to know how things end. Do their parents get in on it or what? It would be interesting if they did!
I think that "quads" is a great story. Keep writing them. Incest is definately a great topic to read. I personally like to read about when someone accidentaly gets pregnant... so thats just an idea. i look forward to ur next story!
Great story line!! Please, please, please keep it going. Just wondering what the parents do?? Pregnancys??
Take a chance. Get the boys together as well! Break the barrier and see where it takes you.
Keep the parents out of it, but keep them supportive of the bond the the Quads have between them.
Wonderfull. Can we see some babies and all the bits that go with them. Of and definately get the parents involved, brilliant. x
Wonderfully written, great suspense and build-up to climax (no pun intended). You seem to be an excellent writer and I assume that either you are gifted, or that your full-time job is writing erotic literature, or at least in the literary field. Keep on writing. I look forward to the next installment in (I hope) a long novel,novella. or chain of stories. Excellent foreshadowing and use of pauses. Bravo
The parents should accept the relationship but not join in yet...later the kids could find out that they are the product of an incestous relationship (mom and dad are actually brother and sister).
Let the parents say "well we see you have found out about the birds and the bees may we join you?" from there there should be endless possiblities of combinations. This is a great story please let it continue. See my story "our Great Family Adventure" Doer
You have hinted that there was a reason for the large shower but that was to be another story. You have the start to make this a real family story. Looking forward to more chapters. May 2004 be fantastic for you and yours.
GREAT STORY HOPE YOU BRING THE PARENTS IN THE NEXT STORY. I HOPE YOU CONTINUE WITH AT LEAST 6 MORE STORIES. I AM SURE THEY MUST HAVE AUNTS OR UNCLES AND OR COUSINS.
RACER24
I agree you have to keep it going with the parents getting in bed with them.
A good second installment. You've already put down some foreshadowing as far as getting the parents involved, so I'd guess that you've already made your decision in that regard. For the record, however, I do indeed think that the parents should get involved in SOME way. Just try not to get too cliche'd with it, please- secret incest society, long-running history of it in the family, mom and dad are also brother-sister... those kinds of things are cliches (I note, also, that I've been guilty of using such a cliche in a story like this... and while it worked, it also felt like a cop-out). Check out "And the Children Shall Lead Them" for an interesting way to get the parents involved. *Drawing* the parents into the situation gives it more dramatic flavor and intrigue as opposed to just making them "magically" willing and ready.
Please try to pay attention to typos- there's quite a number of them in both the first and second installments. Typos invariably break up the flow and should be avoided whenever possible.
Keep going!
Yes you should keep this story going with the parents getting involved too.
makes me wish i had a sister and brother and sister and brother, definitely hot!!