by CorruptingPower
I have said it before and will again. I am REALLY enjoying this series and the spin off. You are really doing great. Biggest wish is chapters would come faster.
Thank you so much.
Good stuff. Keep the chapters rolling, a bit faster would be good.
Scores 5/5
This series has been super entertaining twist on the outrageous covid battles that have occurred. Love the premise and the cure. Wonderful development of characters, and conflicts to overcome. Keep them coming! Please? ;))
I make a (free, available to all) weekly update every week on my Patreon on Wednesdays with the targeted public release schedule for the coming month. There's also a link to it on my Twitter. Stories are also available at my Patreon months before they're available publicly.
Great episode. I feel more and more this should be a movie script even though Hollywood is too prude to ever produce something like this. Keep going. Can't wait how this all turns into more action when the clans are all complete. I am sure you have some cool stuff planned.
Enjoyed the chapter. I am a little peeved by some of your word choices for non American English dialogues. Like 'a spot of' actually means 'a little', not 'a lot', or what Australians mean by 'skivvies'. You wouldn't be freezing in your skivvies.
Being as I'm 8 years older than Andy, I know that all the slang coming out of some of the girls' mouths would drive me even more mental than I already am. That alone would be why I'd put my minimum age to 22.
One thing that jumped out at me on the second read-thru here was noticing that just after a conversation with Taylor about how she hurt Lauren by cheating on her, Taylor propose sex with 2 other girls and Andy, without any apparent conversation with Lauren! I feel like an acknowledgement of what Lauren and Taylor's "marriage" expectations ahead of this could ease how that scene seemed discordant.
To be modest is fine, but to downplay yourself every day gets tedious.
Still, 5/5