All Comments on 'Quarantined'

Fun story but definitely in need of some serious proofreading and editing.

Hot premise, all but ruined by careless misspellings, but the kid that a spellchecker may not catch.

"she saw the door was open. She peaked in,"

*peeked

"Too her surprise, Byron grabbed her" *to

"How long where you there," Byron muttered. *were

"Byron increased his pace as he starred into his sister's eyes." *stared into

I could cite more examples. Point being your story would have earned a 5 instead of a 4, .except for the sloppy spelling

Yea. Fuck that sister pussy. Made my dick hard

Terrible... Clearly no editor. Hangs his own cock in his face! Total loss of continuity to the story when the author screws up so bad with grammar as to not carry tense correctly or character within the line. You should have just wrote. Byron fucked his little sister the end.

You need a good proof readed in the worst way.

AWESOME!!!!!

Good story.

Just the right length and passion.

Hope you continue.

Needs a proof-reader. Through her on the couch? And many other examples. Premise was OK, however.

Well, not bad for a first submission. There are unfortunately some things you should take note of, as listed below.

Now, before you delete this comment, the following are mildly, perhaps more distracting of nature. Please get someone to proof read your submissions. Yes, I know that is a daunting task, but your courage and willingness to submit on LIT is encouraging. I myself is not brave enough to take That step.

Look at the following carefully, perhaps it makes sense, especially if you are writing (not) in your native tounge. “It took a moment for the color to return from to his face.” And “He always acted like the boss of the house, but could he prove he was.” also “Too her surprise, Byron grabbed her..”

Again “standing over his sister with his cock hanging right in front of his face.” Questionable “she grasped his firm ass to keep balance, the other working his lower shaft.”

“..put her hand on the back of her brothers head, which only increased his intensity. As he ate her out, she took mental note of what was happen.”

"Whose runs this apartment, he said”, and "Yes, fucking put me in my places," or "Katie moaned as her did.."

Not all doom and gloom, perhaps if time is spent on proof-reading (or editing) you will enjoy a solid following.

Good luck. May the Force be with you from now on.

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Wow, too many grammatical errors and misspellings to really enjoy. I found myself spending more time editing and trying to figure out how the sentence should read, sorry. On the bright side, it had a good plot and plenty of potential; just needs to be proofed and edited, even is it’s you reading it a few times to catch the errors

THAT got you a 1 star author! and an auto dumped story.

When the hell will people learn the difference between where and were? More and more writers are using where instead of were. It's almost as bad as the ones that say "should of" instead of should have. They don't know they're (don't even get me started on they're, there and their), trying to say should've.

Keep writing. This was good. Make the next one better.

You lost me as soon as our hero grabbed his " eight inch cock". As one experienced lady so eloquently put it," It's not the size of the wand that counts, it's the magic that it weaves."

Could be a great story if have someone edit it. Bad grammar makes it difficult to read.

Get an editor

I liked the story. It was not well written and needed to be prof read. When I write my stories, I use my computers read out loud program. I know I don't catch all my mistakes when I use it but it does help. I also use the free edit program with my micro soft program. It does help. I will never post comments Anonymously. Keep writing and like I said I liked the story,

Many families have helped each other during the quarantine. It has been very good for some.

Good story that was let down by heaps of grammar and spelling errors.

Maybe proof read your stories more in the future, or get someone to edit them. It would be a shame to have a good story downgraded for such reasons. Otherwise thanks

Couldn’t even get interested in the story. Did you even read it before you posted. Spelling, grammar, syntax.

“He exposed her tits and put his nipple in his mouth”

How hard is it to read your own story before you post?

Too many errors to finish reading it.

Yeah! Rough and ready . Just the ticket .

I really liked this story.

I enjoyed this, and believe me i know a few families who started fucking each other for real during pandemic when everyone was forced to stay home.

I enjoyed it and I volunteer to proofread the next one.