All Comments on 'Rachel'

... that you're really another married dude. No offense but you write from a woman's point of view. Either that or you're the insufferable smarmy, smirking romantic who did EVERYTHING for his woman - except be the man in the relationship. Sack up AMD! You're male characters (throw in the Denise guy too) have little sense self worth. I half expect them to send flowers apologizing for not "sensing" that the marriage was in trouble. One time mistakes can (and deserve to) be forgiven. But this isn't a fender bender, it's a total wreck. Move along folks there's nothing to see here, nothing worth salvaging. Try again.

Different kind of story. I am not sure that the style of writing won't get irritating if used too much. Basically he took advantage of her assertion that she "still loved him and wanted to stay with him" to have an excellent revenge on her since she will suffer all he suffered both being cheated

on by Tim, and have the one she "loved" relating to other women. Thank you OMD.

Hey, you made my morning. Thanks for writing.

At least from the premise of placing her in a box. My thought would be why bother. Just end it if that is what he wants. Why have her stay with him for a period of time so he can cheat on her again. She was in that situation once before and while it took her eight years to forget, she did forget. Kudos for creativity but the solution just isnt logical.

Bullets comments were well stated. I do not like being winked at by an author in the middle of a story. However, that aside, your story was well crafted and rather fun. I do not concur with your premise about the wife needing to spend time with Tim, but the argument is not without some merit. I rather believed that it was a new angle on revenge. I have rarely seen cheaters happy together. As an aside, I do not understand why so many commentors beleive that each story has to have a "new" angle. A well told story is sufficent. Thanks and keep writing! -ttom

for some reason. Still, it's written by a puta so I expected the male trashing and the 'frail male ego' bit whilst hyping the puta. It doesn't have to be personal experience of the puta writer to jot down crap like this however it DOES express typical puta beliefs of the response of a metrosexual male inasmuch as describing living in a 'gray' area rather than black or white. In fact most such putas as this writer want to live in 'colour' rather than either of the two w/o. I gotta give it to her in following the thoughtlessness of every puta who writes this sorta slopehead trauma drama crap - too unrealistic, no real man lives in a gray world as every puta does and that's the maim failure of this writer and this story of hers, just like all such putas trying to write from a male perspective.

The story was not bad if a little odd, but I had the same feeling that Thebullet did. The pseudo sophisticated dialogue that the author seemed so proud of and insisted on sharing with the reader got wearing after a while.

60 year old George

I'll confess that I found Kevin's solution extremely odd--but as other readers have said, it's hard to find any original ways to resolve stories like this. By far the most likely thing, it seems to me, would be for Kevin to simply tell Rachel to fuck off, and go on with his life by himself. So hats off for trying something different! I like your writing very much and hope you'll continue posting stories. Thanks, ohio

<p>I thought the writing was too arch. The author seemed very pleased with his sense of humor and was more than willing to break down the wall between writer and reader to tell us so. I'm uncomfortable with that kind of writing, especially if the 'humor' is weak, as in this case. The author patting himself on the back for his clever comments just doesn't work for me, even more so when the comments just aren't that clever.</p>

<p>When we finally got around to the meat of the story there wasn't much new there. I did like the concept of forcing the ex to stay with the boyfriend so her hookup with him would end up feeling old and boring or at least not as exciting as a new or cheating relationship.</P>

<p>I guess it's reached the point where there isn't a lot new to say in these cheating wife stories that hasn't already been said. So kudos for the one new concept added by this author. It's why I'm such a fan of HDK. Almost all his stories, successfully or not, come at us from a completely new angle. That's tough.</p>

But one question remains, Why would anyone want to get back with or start dating a person who has been fucking someone else for a year and if you include the time she was cheating in the marriage a further Four months. Sorry but I personally wouldn't even think about the ex-wife. She is history as would the friends we shared I would want knew friends who ahd no connection with the ex-wife.

At the end of the day both she and her lover would cheat again, after all she spoke of the thrill of it. Cheaters seem to be unable to stop, forcing her to face both herself and her lover is a great revenge for the real world, though perhaps not as fun as some of the outlandish things on this site.

I dont do or say this often but this a great GREAT story. First its angle is Unique. And Kevin's handling of his emotionsare strong without being extrem or wimpy.

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the Killer line was Rachel upon being discovered and caught actually says/asks <b> <i> "I guess you're right. So...what happens now? Do you want me to end it?"</i> </b>

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I mean what do you SAY or DO after that?! If she has to ask.... come on its over and all the crying and pleading and sobbing wont make a difference.

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Kevin's conditions are intended to do 2 things

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1) Rachel is crying sobbing and says she want to stay married to Kevin... but 18 hoous earlier she said she Might Love Tim... her ex boyfriend.

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Kevin is using Rachel's admission that her affair is based on sexual fantasy ideal/ past experiences with Tim... to force her to realize that she really does NOT want him (Kevin).

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To go from I might Love HIM ...to I only want you...in 24 hours is of couse a LIE and a deceit. Rachel is lying to herself as well as Kevin.

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2) Kevin is gambling that Tim will cheat on Rachel which is a certainty since those two entire relationship is based on cheating and the unstated right that if two people are HOT for each other.. its ok to fuck no matter what the consequences.

Cheating spouses inflict a lot of damage all around, somtimes it can be repaired sometimes not. With no children he did the only thing he could, moved on. Thanks for the story.

The only part that was odd was Kevin's insistence that she loved Tim despite her statements to the contrary. Likewise, no one can be logical in an extreme emotional situation, so his attempts to be "logical" were simply laughable.