All Comments on 'Rachel'

I really hope this is a start of a series. Nicely paced, real potential in the characters…..

Good premise.

But once the sex started it simply zooooomed.

Really needed to slow down. Go step by step. Needs many more details.

Needs dialog during the blowjob. Needed dialog before the blowjob when she was playing with his cock and balls.

Needed tension to overcome.

Doesn't make sense that she'd been fucked only once before but was so adept with her mouth.

Needed TAGS.

Three stars.

Clever story, a little sloppy on the proofreading (waws instead of was). Sequel?