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"I'll show you how much I liked that as soon as I get my breath back," I said.
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Thanks for reading and, hopefully, enjoying my story. Please comment and vote.
- COMMENTS
Anonymousabout 1 month agoStarted out great, self conversation was ok. Develope a sense of including a lot more details, and stretch the story out. Try to break the story into paragraphs, and it will be much easier to read. Finally, the end seemed rushed. Once you were inside your sister, describe how it felt. Also, imagine how she felt. Maybe the guilt of having her own brother's cocktail inside her, washed away by the intense feeling of how erotic, taboo, how forbidden it felt. Maybe she could tell him she wants him to blow his seed in her, or struggles when she feels it first shooting inside her, but give in as it's already too late...
More details would help tremendously, you have a great base there.
Bro-4-Sis here on literotica.
Oseeker8 months agoInteresting that she didn't like oral.
I went down on a chick or two that didn't have great personal hygiene so maybe her previous experience with oral turned her off due to that.
A pity....My first experience going down on my girlfriend was wonderful for me. I was so in love with her I just wanted to inhale & taste her essence but she thought I was a pervert & didn't enjoy what I was doing to her. She was young.
I failed to hold on to her. I bet she learned to love it later.
I have a loving memory of her earthy scent 60 years later though.
I still have a warm loving place in my heart for Jenny & will until I die.
ROCKY70over 4 years agoThe story needs work, but I think you can handle it. My only outcry is little sister with a D cup.....ok read THANKS
petskunkover 6 years agoAuthorThis was the first story I ever wrote for publication. It was written quite a few years ago. My style has developed since then. As I said, I have every intention of rewriting it but it is some ways down the list right now. Thanks, though, for your frankness.
Aussie1951over 6 years agoNo build up ..No detail and like the other comments far too short. It came across to me you wanted to see the reaction to this story to gauge whether or not to continue on with this story..disappointing really..⭐️⭐️ Sorry
