by Hypoxia
Great story, now take your medication and the nurse will take you back to your room.
and, to be honest, so over the top that buy in on the story is very weak.
But for OTT, not too bad.
Green-something
That's what happens when I read all those old horror comix. Boogeys!
What a stunningly twisted story which could only have come from a perfectly twisted mind.
Should the 'ladies' amongst you tend to lean towards the 'size-queen' end of the pork-protruberance section, it may further your cause to enquire about the washing machine size, make and spin-cycle of a prospective bearer of a bbc... Heavy investments in to mayonaise shares might be a dead giveaway as well.;) ..
I just about never comment on stories, but this was just so twistedly, wonderfully weird and awful that I really was about to hack up a lung laughing.
Yeah, OK it was wrong and sick - and hilarious - but then dark humor is like food in Stalinist Russia: not everyone gets it.
You need to run for President in 2024!! On the Democrat ticket. You just might win in a huge landslide.
Most excellent writing! I admire your skills
Thanks for your appreciation! The writing technique is an old comicbook style. I read too much of EERIE,and TALES FROM THE CRYPT etc.The objective reporter-narrator sometimes reports, sometimes interjects, and sometimes opens-up characters' heads to look inside. The storyteller here could have been the Cryptkeeper.
BTW I first wrote this four years ago. It took this long to tame it enough to pass Laurel's scrutiny. But I admit it's better now, and fits its comic=book inspirations.
hate to say it, but i enjoyed the story! Randy's revenge was as perfect as Gilda's retirement plan. The sound effects were hilarious, and I thoroughly enjoyed the detailed descriptions. The way you switched from story telling to first person narrative and then almost like a reporter.......what sort of technique is that? i thought it was a very interesting if slightly bizarre read. Thank you.