All Comments on 'Raven's Dream Ch. 01'

I love the universe you created here.

I need more, please!!

continue and have him marry the twins and use a good edditor from now on. the writing here sucked and needs a rewrite using a good editor . SHOW SOME PRIDE IN YOUR WORK AND A WHOLE LOT OF RESPECT FOR THE READERS AND ALWAYS USE A GOOD EDITOR AND BE SURE TO FINISH THE STORY BEFORE POSTING DO IT RIGHT OR NOT AT ALL.

look mate.. if you do not like a story, move on.

Look mate.. if you do not like a <i>comment</i>, move on.

I get tired of you assholes that bitch like little babies when someone has criticism on here. You must be one of those cry baby liberals.

I enjoyed the story . Yes there was some small errors that a good editor would fix,but still i was able to enjoy the read. Hope there will be more. Thanks

Thank you for your comments. I will look for someone to edit my future stories, especially chapter 2 which is in the works. If all goes well, expect it within a week and a half, pending on getting an editor, and lengthening the story

You don't need an editor. Just buy a simple book on grammar and punctuation. It would take you about fifteen minutes to review the rules of commas, so you wouldn't keep repeating the same distracting mistakes. As far as learning to write better, just keep practicing; this is an interesting first attempt.

"... and use a good edditor from now on."

A good 'edditor?' What in the hell is an edditor?? SHOW SOME PRIDE IN YOUR WORK AND A WHOLE LOT OF RESPECT FOR THE COMMENT READERS AND ALWAYS USE A GOOD EDITOR AND BE SURE TO FINISH THE COMMENT BEFORE POSTING DO IT RIGHT OR NOT AT ALL.

Oh, and be sure to put some punctuation somewhere in your ginormous run-on sentences next time. Maybe even think about writing a story yourself rather than simply taking nonconstructive potshots at what we post here.

I don't read lesbo or gay crap stories about the mentally ill.