by SimonDoom
what a wonderful imagination you have, and then be able to weave such a great story is amazing.
Read like a script from "Two and a Half Men". Charlie Sheen the lawyer and Holland Taylor as Maxine. A good lesbian session would have made for a better ending though!!
This story is a bit of a cartoon. As such, it's not bad. Disney should grab it, make an animated version of it, and then give it to Ron DeSantis for his campaign for president. ~~JB
Where's the rest of the story? We've had 3 pages of prelude and it cut off just when the action was about to kick off.
This is confusing.
Could have been better.
I was hoping for a slow burn, like the story ‘My Hot Mom’, or another creator’s story ‘My Promiscuous Mom’. The premise had promise, but this story has too much fluff, and not enough build-up. And it has action in bursts.
Great premise, poor execution.