All Comments on 'Rebellious'

Excellent!!! Now i need to cum!

Me, too!

This was pretty basic but a fair delivery. The whole virgin thing felt sort of forced because he was just assuming, and if she has a dildo it would be pretty weird if she never used it? Besides that and a few grammatical issues it was good though. Solid 3/5

Ah, Literotica! Where all the pussies squirt, all the cocks are huge and everyone cums simultaneously!

Far from original, but still fairly hot.

damn i rubbed my pussy raw b/c of this

Just the same formula as others. Several mistakes, too. But it wasted a few minutes of time, so there is that to be said for it.

It's all been overdone before and this is just wanking material for adolescent boys and girls.

She'll need many more spankings and probably a little of the paddle, belt, and cane before he makes her his daughter-slut-slave. And she'll love every minute of the process. Five stars!

hott!...

was fine until he had an 8inch cock thicker than his wrist, way too big for reality, even so the story was good and could have happened, I know because i started fucking my daughter after spanking her for swearing at her mother.

Geez, this started out so good and then you fucked it all up by blowing up the slow burn. You gotta draw that shit out dude, five minutes into the story is rookie numbers man! My usual style is the erotic Sci-Fi/Fantasy genre, but I'll occasional delve into romance, denial, incest or light BDSM on occasion. The best ones are the slow burns, drawing out that desire. Instead you gave some quick (great) teasing and then quickly slammed a 2X4 down on top of that clit.

Super hot story, please keep writing.