All Comments on 'Recall'

by SyleusSnow

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rayirony over 4 years ago

Twisted

Nicely twisted at that.

oaking over 4 years ago

Very nice twist.

Very good short story, great twist.

Please keep writing!

ThatNewGuy over 4 years ago

Nicely done

You did a great job giving these two characters distinct personalities in a very short amount of time. I really enjoyed your descriptions, too. The paragraph describing how Cindy went from looking deeply into his eyes, to their connection, to losing focus with her head lolling was really well done. I always enjoy writers who can paint a specific, vivid image with their words. I look forward to reading some of your other work.

SyleusSnow over 4 years agoAuthor

Thanks

Well, thank you for the kind words, ThatNewGuy. The story had to be concise: I wrote it for a contest with a 5000 word limit. Looking forward to your comments on my other stories.

Omenainen over 3 years ago

Oh! Didn’t see that coming. Very nice story. Quite a lot of story for so few words.

SatyrDick about 2 years ago

Great story, Great twist!

10/10!!!!!

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