All Comments on 'Redemption'

I liked your story but i would have like it to be longer, their feelings more detailed.

The story is beautiful and well-written (well, there are a couple of hiccups, but let's not dwell on that part). But it seems to end abruptly. For parts of it, I can say that I've been there; not in the same way, but "close enough" to understand fully what transpired. It needed a little more time to expand on the finish, not necessarily in some hard-core porn way, but in the sense of exploring the emotions and the resolution of the underlying conflict.

Do keep up the good work, but focus on those endings.

-- KK in Texas

Was part of the story accidentally left out? If not, you need an editor...quickly.

please, keep writing stuff like this!

very sweet and tender =) i love how the man cuddles her and makes her feel secure.

There needs to be more. Just because his bride wants to give him a blowjob doesn't mean she was abused. How did he know? What did she do or say that would hint to him that something had happened.

A lot of women give their partners oral sex. It's a gesture of love, in a loving relationship. Her wanting to give him a blowjob doesn't equal abuse.