All Comments on 'Redemption Falls: Stillwater Rises'

Glad to see the works finished. Liked it a lot and appreciate the hard work that went into it. Look forward to more of your stories.

Thank you

I've really liked some of your other work, and I gave part 1 four stars. But in part 2, you started losing me on page 6 with the simultaneous rapes. I didn't believe what you presented. Both Tara and Amber are too smart and too committed to get into those situations. And from then on, it seemed like you didn't know how to get out of it, and you just rushed to the end. Too bad. Those women deserved better.

I think you rely way too much on coincidence. The rule in fiction is that you are allowed one coincidence per story, and that is usually in the setup that gets the story going. And you need a better copy editing system. Too many typos, misspelling, and grammatical errors. But keep writing.

I love it. :) To be honest this whole series was a little dramatic for my taste, but that was kind of the point. Anyway, the characters made it all worth it. I love me some sweet and sexy lesbians, d'aw. And the hetero stuff was sweet as well. Seriously I just love your characters, haha. Don't ever stop writing. Best wishes!

Absolutely loved this story and of course the first one where it all started, really am going to miss reading all about them, loved the fact that there was such a good story line and that it didnt depend soley on sex! Looking forward to reading your other stories now!

Loved the story. I did find it disconcerting to have a child referred to as 'louse' which I interpreted as being 'Louise'.

There were some other errors - notably 'Patients' instead of 'patience' but it was a great read despite these.

Errors be damned, it was so great. I love your work. Very creative.

i can't believe is already morning, i could not stop to read these series, and a few more of u work the last 40h :)), it was ...OMG .... can't describe it AMAZING i was always on my tows to c what happens next u a incredible righter i love u work, its exiting, fresh, and i get a great feeling i read u story's

these one was so great , at the beginning i cold not c the end of the second part ( normally i can i a story, reading to many :P ) i thot maybe Mary and Sherry will get together til i so its 10 pages long ( i love long story's that don't let u breath )

it was a great story and i love u imagination, u ar one of the best u have all my respect

It didn't turn out like I predicted (I thought Sherry and Mary would get together) but everyone (that mattered) ended up happy. I had to skip over the hetero sex between Sherry and Brad because that's not my thing, but I'm sure it was beautifully written as well. Gave you 5 stars for both parts! ~ L

I'm so glad for the happy ending!

I know this is an older story, and you're probably not going to go back and change it now, but I hope the baby's name was intended to be "Louise", not "Louse", LOL!

I love your stories...I always do. I only have one little strand of constructive criticism. Just try to describe everybody more. I mean I understand ppl like to have the readers kinda make their own vision of the person in their head but the story might have been easier to picture in my head. Otherwise GREAT story. Loved it. 5 star rating.

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Keep it up- Nicole<3

I quite enjoyed the story—the fact that I devoured 19 pages in one day (ending at 3:51 in the morning, I might add) is a testament to your skill in writing!

However, there were also a few things that were distracting to me or that I would have liked to see more fleshed-out.

1) As a previous commenter said, I hope "Louse" was supposed to be "Louise". As it is, her name is the singular form of lice, as in head lice. Not a particularly attractive name for a child. :-)

2) I would have liked to see more of Trace's backstory. He seems kind of one-dimensional: an asshole for the sake of being an asshole, purely for the convenience of the story. I think it would have been more believable to give him a reason for being a jerk apart from "he was being blackmailed at one point", or to have him go through some sort of character development, or both.

3) Amber seems sort of like a Mary Sue-type character: city girl comes back to her backwater town, turns it on its head, and everyone loves her there except for a few idiotic jerks despite the "character flaw" of a fiery temper (which isn't really a flaw in this case because it facilitates the town's change for the better).

I know this is a monster comment, but honestly if I weren't interested in seeing more of your work, I wouldn't take the time to comment at all. Keep writing!

This is a great story and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Plenty of drama, conflict and believable characters. I was pleased when Brad turned up---I was starting to think that all the men in the town were total arseholes. What slightly spoiled the story for me was the huge number of careless spelling errors: you are quite a good writer and as such I feel you should have a better grip on spelling. The most common error throughout the whole story was referring to the baby as 'Louse'. I'm sure you must have meant 'Louise'---nobody could call an innocent girl baby 'Louse'!

Was a very amazing story wish you would write more!

Fantastic story. Both parts. I had a feeling that Amber and Tara were both ending up pregnant. I'm glad it had a happy ending, although I hated to see it end. I will definitely read more of your stories.

Great read! The only part i didnt care for was the fact that both amber and tara allowed themselves into a situation where rape might be involved, i mean i would have been totally upset with tara cause she wasnt drugged she just allowed herself to get obliterated and got pregnant cause she trusted a male friend of hers. I just dont think i wouldve been able to forgive either woman especially tara. And i wouldnt trust her as i previously did if i was amber. Anyway, i loved mary and robyns story and im glad mary finally got some and with someone to whom i think she was attracted to in the first place. Keep writing though all in all i did like everyones story,even brad and sherrys.

A very good and detailed story! Thank you!

"I'm the proverbial unwanted mistake and useless girl"

Should be the only clue you need to not see Louse as a typo of Louise.

The general arc of the two stories is fairly predictable - everybody has to get matched up - but that's almost always the case in these stories. The twists and turns are what make them so much fun. However...

I'd have liked more character development, though. I totally get it that Amber is bad-ass, and that's great. However, all we see is pretty much her reactive side. Everything she does (and her thoughts) are responses to the (really fun!) twists and turns. Other than "one and done" and "happily ever after", I didn't get to know her at all.

Would be better if your Eric Cartman clone Trace hadn't had a happy ending, but meh.

Louse is a Dutch name pronounced loose or loo-seh see the wiki page for Lousewies van der Laan for an example.

OK. Bailed on this story on Page 6.

These people may be friends, and are socially entertaining, but have no clue what love is.

I'll leave them to their sad weak selves.

Oh. And by the way, turning a totally strong character like Amber into a weak victim over some drunk pussy is the lowest form of bad writing. Strong people don't do that. Without life threatening motivation.

Okay I read both parts in one sitting. You had a lot happening here. And for some reason, I could keep up. Congratulations. Robyn and Mary was a given. And when Amber and Tara both got raped, it was expecting. Pardon the pun. For the plot twists I still find it a very good read. If you makes feel better I will probably read it again. If I had to compare this to anything, I would compare it to The Golden Girls meets the porn industry. ;)

I still give you 5 stars.

A good story.

Thank you

The nurse who took that baby from her mother to hand to Allen, without permission, should lose her job immediately. Good Lord.

I'm still baffled what the difference between "cum" and "climax" is supposed to be. Different degrees of orgasm? Squirting? That's not really how we talk about orgasms.

Also, Sherri is a fool of she lets people with Momma Martin and Allen's word boundaries around her kids. What's to stop history repeating when the kids get older? The incest taboo isn't just about blood. It's deeply wrong to see a child you've helped raise in that way, innately. Something is broken if that isn't in place.

Second the anon complaining about the nurse. Horrifically unprofessional. You don't hand a baby to a man without mom's agreement and then seek permission, father or not. Not without a court order and a police officer. She doesn't know if the guy is abusive. And... he is! Including to the older child! Infuriating.