by Quinn_McMullen
I really enjoyed this story. I hope you can write more like it
You wrote it so well l felt l was in the rooms or outside with the characters and their friends. A nice touch from the author. It is always fun to have a villain but l think you went overboard somewhat with Jack. You took everything away from him. In a place with guns available when you leave people with nothing to loss they will strike back with deadly force.
Even in my country women and children are murdered by husbands backed into a corner with nowhere to turn. No guns, but knives and petrol followed by suicide prove often enough how winning and destroying by taking everything is never a smart thing to do.
Still, it was a great story and it scores 5/5
This is a well-written drama with excellent characters and plenty of romance. The story is very interesting and really holds the attention of the reader throughout. The hard work that went into this revision has been well worth it, and it fully deserves a Five Stars rating.
Ok. So I'm only on page 2, at the oral sex bit but I have to say that the few times I have managed to piss a woman off is when I've tried to "tease" them. I mean they are really getting into it and you back off and don't like that AT ALL. Just saying.
Ok rant over, back to pg 2.
Tho I Am not into anal at all, It’s pleasing that he washes either digits or penis straight after anal, as some writer in Lit. don’t practice that basic hygiene and that’s gross
Great story, I fell in love with Zoe and Chris. You really made the characters feel real. Enjoyed from start to finish.