All Comments on 'Relation with Moms Friend Pt. 01'

***Thanks for the read good start.

It is obvious that English is not your first language but what prevents you from running this through an editor?

And it does seem you do not even have an idea or a plot for a complete story.

Please. Get an editor, scrap that, get several. I gave you a 2 for being brave enough to submit a story, but the story itself deserves one star.

Good premise.

BUt English very stilted.

And sex begins much, much too fast. Too abruptly.

Lacks foreplay. Lacks preliminaries.

He's seen her naked. She doesn't ask if he's ever seen any other woman naked? Did he like what he saw? What did he like best? Did he get hard from seeing her naked? Would he like to see more of her? Would he like to touch her? Her breasts? Her ass? Her pussy?

Would he like her to show/teach him how to make woman happy?

Etc.

Three stars.

An interesting story, and it ends in a real cliffhanger!

English is, I guess, not your first language. There are very many instances of words being omitted or sentences not properly constructed. You need an editor. It's all understandable, but it would be easier to read if it was edited to improve the English.

Good start to an interesting tale. I understand that English is not your native language but I still like the story.