by Vickymp
One thing I really look forward to in a lesbian story is a pretty young woman being seduced by an experienced older woman. But the very fact that your young woman is already gay and meets her older woman at a gay club kind of defeats that whole fantasy seduction element right from the start!
I wish she had instead met an older woman at a regular bar, not knowing that she was a lesbian, and the seduction had ensued from there. I think that would have been far more erotic and interesting. Just my opinion.
Dont worry about your writing- you know how to make your readers hot; impossible not to cum.almost like you write with a faint accent. More please
I liked it when the older woman straddled her face, as she was tied down, rubbing her wet pussy furiously over her pretty face, using her face.....hot!