All Comments on 'Renee's Training'

Please do get and editor. The grammar issues do make reading difficult. The concept is worth continuing.

i really love this story. please continue....

this is so HOT!

Oh please continue - you had my clitty soooo stiff!

Very good, hope you take her training to the next level.

whats up with the sister? why did she do this? did she sell him?does she want a sister a slave?

oh god why did you stop so soon i was so horny reading your story my sissy clit was so hard all the way through ,more chapters soon please

oh please keep this story going, my 3 1/2-incher is aching to find out how everything will turn out for renee

#1. Learn to spell.

#2. Pick a perspective, and stay with it. (First person, third person; just pick one!)

#3. Get an editor.

#4. Get an editor.

#5. Get an editor.

In short, the story could have been good, but the writing was pathetic.

THIS WAS 2 HOT 4 WORDS!

Great job on this :)

I see someone has already pointed out the annoying parts of the story. As they said "get a perspective" and stick with it. Either you are telling the story as Nathan/Renee or you are telling the story as a narrator. Small spelling errors or even the large misuse of words was annoying as hell. (Example: saying "venerable" when I think you meant "vulnerable"). It makes for a long story being intolerably longer. I really wanted to finish reading it because the story line was interesting but I had to stop in the middle of the second page because My brain started to hurt. I will encourage you to continue but please get an editor or proof read it yourself.

3 stars if I could score it.

Great first story. More, please!

god this got me so fucking hot I had to rape myself dreaming of me being Renee and all the fun she is about to have. and when she leaves and goes home to her sister and mom that will be so good for her...HURRY

i would love to read more about Renee and follow her thru in her life

That was great and i'd love to see more of it. It showed great potential and aside from the whole perspective thing and a few spelling errors it was great. Please keep 'em cumming

Please continue this story. On a 1 to 10scale, your story was at least 100!!!

great wish it was me keep in going

I'm looking forward to the rest of her saga.

Normally I lose interest in the stories after masterbating to them but I came twice and finished the story! Please give me more!

a great story, so vivid! I so wanted to be in her place!

when is the next part

very good writing, the change of POV was well done.

looking forward to the follow on.

write some more p-lease!!! and soon

Really, amazing story! I hope you will write more of this stuff.

Loved it, you so have to do a sequel. please?

great concept. but please stick to one point of veiw. also be aware that

spell check can lead you in the wrong direction. just because the word is properly spelled doesn' mean it's the proper word

Great beginning, now add a few more chapters.

amazing! Im dying for the next chapter! Please do it soon :D

oh keep going.....

Awesome story! Love the way she's forced into being aroused against her wishes.Please (pretty please) write more?

Keep up the good work.More interested in mistres, than master..But good story

Just amazing please continue to make more

please please please.

Thanks for writing it and keep going!

what happens next? make it soon...

Please pick a tense and stick with it! You use Nathan, he, she, and I, interchangeably throughout and it completely breaks the fiction. Other than that, good job.

Love the writing, but your grammar and spelling are abysmal, and it just ruins the flow. I loved the story though!

Really enjoyed this story. Is there a sequel coming?

oh yes please write more I wish I were him

I wish I would be at his place. I would drink glasses of that cum all day long.

so great story. please make 2nd chapter. lots of cum.

Agree with other comments and look forward to the next chapter

Spelling and narrative did not interfere with the mental picture you painted. Part of my mind wanted to be trained, too. Literotica and these gay sissy stories are brainwashing me...

Help

More please

This is such an awesome story. I love it so much. I want this to be me. Please write more chapters!!!!!

the pov change is chaotic as hell, but still good work.

Oh to be trained and use do beautifully please train me break me I dream of things like this but my straight mind wont allow me To go threw with going down on a man let alone give in to becumming a cock crazed cum slut that I dream ofof being made into at night in bed next to my wife who I wish would make me her bitch and her willing girlfriend but then she would never please help me! Take me and you can have her too to do with as you wish

This was wonderfully written and I think it should be continued

nice story

you should continue

this story is so good can hardly wait for next chapter.please dont wait to long to continue my clit was so hard i had to pleasure myself with a vibe in my butt and 1 in my mouth my 5" clitty came so hard i came all ovr my dildo and licked it clean anyone want to chat yahoo msgr crossdressing05

cant wait till future chapters, although more of renee's pov would be nice

You must write a follow up story to "Renee's Training", please. Show Renee having more training as he must please his trainers and voluntarily please men and love it.

Having read hundreds of Literotica stories of straight guys being forced, blackmailed, reluctant and seduced into sucking cock, eating cum, being sodomized and learning to love it, need it and want it, I have brainwashed myself. I am there mentally wanting to be a bottom, being sodomized while dressed as a girl for my man. How do I meet or find a gentlemen, well-endowed and caring, who will buy lingerie for me to model and teach me to be his loving bottom?

I liked the story very much...would love to read more!!

Thank you for bringing this to life!

It's a good story but you have a lot of mistakes. Try reading your story several times before submitting it. Don't just rely on spellcheck. You end up with a lot of wrong words spelled correctly. Venerable instead of vulnerable, as an example. Also you switched from third person to first person and back again in the beginning of your story. Then you told us you were switching to first person and dipped back into third. Just pick one and stick with it. It breaks up the flow of the story too much. There is a lot of free editing help online. All in all though it's a sexy story, just needs work. Don't give up keep writing. Maybe you could explain why Nathan's sister would betray him like that. Is she just evil and greedy or is it revenge for something he did to her? Oh, and it's spelled mattress. Good luck.

Love the story. Please do more. I need to know how the training and complete sissy slave turns out.

As a first effort,... Spectacular... I want more of this story. The Grammar Nazis might have some things to say, screw em, but double check before posting. This is a great story with good & balanced sexy storyline, not to overdescriptive and overall a great concept. I await the next chapters

MS. KARLI KUNT ABSOLUTELY LOVED THIS STORY !!!! ..... Please write more of these. I am a firm believer that all tiny, micro-clit, slim, thin, weak n wimpy bois can be transformed, transitioned, and trained to love cock. love cum and love being fucked. This is pretty much what my First Wife and her Black Dominatrix Best Girlfriend did to me over about a three month period and IT WORKED. I went from being a "straight" boy to becoming a cock-craving, nympho, little feminized and sissified cock and cum-slut. As our society continues to develop more and more effeminate young white bois with tiny, little, penis-clits, the type of training you describe will be used to fully convert them to hot, little, sexy sissy bitch-bois. PLEASE WRITE MORE !!!! CHECK OUT MY TUMBLR BLOG AT http://justakunt.tumblr.com/ You can also contact me at boitouse2@yahoo.com

thank you so much..can I have more please? this sissy needs more...

sissyBillie

Great story pls next chapter??

More, please? The story was amazing. The only note i'd have for you is to watch which perspective you're in and stick to it. More than a few times in third person, we got a paragraph of Nay in the first person. The opposite happened a couple times in the first person perspective as well. i saw a few other mistakes; using the wrong word in different places was the main thing.

However, overall i love this story, and i would love to read more. i do hope you post again.

A fantasy cum true

next chapter please. I want to see what happens over the next 4 days.

Great story. We all have a submissive side. I would suggest that Renee lives the life of a prostitute and given an opportunity to escape and become Nathan she does not, realizing she loves her new life. I would emphasize Renee's realization that her cock is too small to be able to pleasure a woman and being forced to be transsexual was the only way of being desirable sexually.

As you write the story you keep changing the perspective of the story from first person where it's happening to you (you say I ) and then a few sentences later you are saying Rene's.

Great story, practice makes perfect so keep writing and don't let any negative comments bother you, Just use them to learn if they are helpful.

I see it's been quite a while since this story was posted. It would be a shame not to continue. Pleeeeease tell us what becums of this lucky sissy in training. I could only dream of being forced this way.

Sincerely,

Stevie Kitten

Hot i sometimes wonder if when i was younger i'd would have wsnted to be her

I don't think his position was "venerable". You striked out on this one. I couldn't read your story.

- K

GRIPPING!!!

From my teenage years i have been used and transformed in to a sissy cross dresser by my a uncle and ant .They both used me for any kind of sex they wanted.My ant gave me female horemone to change me in to a women.My uncle would force me to suck his cock and learn how to deep throat and swallow his cum.My ant used me for corset and dildo training.Once a month they would have sex partys and all his friends both men and women would use me any way they wanted to.Most times eight or more men would fuck me and do ass to mouth forcing me to swallow all their loads of cum.

Learn your homophones ffs, and get/use an editor! 😝🤦‍♀️🤯

I did find the mistakes to be annoying and it takes you out of the story. I had to take breaks whenever this happened because it is very difficult to get into something like this when you are continually trying to figure out what the writer is trying to say. It would have been a great read if it had flowed better and you at least managed to leave me interested wondering about the sisters involvement since it isn’t everyday you find a group that creates hypnowhores that are available for some late teenage girl to find and make deals with. I know since I looked both online and in the business directory of the yellow pages.

Oh my god I loved every minute of reading this story as this is exactly what I want to happen to me,I have been dressing up as a gurl for a few years now and believe me it’s such an incredible feeling to be in heels stockings panties very sexy short dress my silicone titties glued makeup painted nails and my own long hair and then have a domant man or woman take charge of me and turn me into a nymphomaniac cock sucking cum swallowing ass fucking little sissy . Omg I’m going to cum just writing this mmmmmmm🫦💋🔥👠🥰💅

Very good story. Looking to reading more

Your MC gave me just what my unusually perverted imagination wants in an erotic sissification fantasy. What a tremendous first effort UR. The hell with all the Grammar errors; it did what you wanted it to do, and that was to allow a secret sissies like myself to vicariously live out a popular sex fantasy through Renee.

I have every confidence that once you learn to write several rough drafts of what you’re posting on here and allow a least a couple of your competent readers to edit yours otherwise sexy prose, Renee’s Training could turn into a great novel. Write on!