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Click here"I...I watched you", I barely managed.
She was shocked at first. It took her a couple of seconds to figure out what to say.
Instead saying anything, she pulled down her dress for the second time this evening, exposing her pretty tits. But this time she let the dress drop all the way to the ground, standing buck naked in front of me, two slim dragons in a fiery embrace dancing above her shaved pussy, remaining still for my eyes only.
"Punish me, husband" she said, as she entered the apartment, only the pale tan lines on her magnificent ass glowing in the dark.
- COMMENTS
MightyHornyover 1 year agoI have no idea why people come here, read bad, unoriginal, unerotic stories, then get offended by other readers for shredding the authors of said awful stories... I mean, if you don't like it, don't read any LW comment sections and move the fuck on... Seriously, always remember that you aren't special, that your opinion is worth as much as anyone else's around here, but I'll keep shaking my head at the 'protect bad writers at all cost' critics. Really, you are truly exhausting... and pathetic.
iammweaselover 1 year agoHoly fuck the homos ate this garbage right up.
Sissy writer and sissy fans. Didnt realize that so many readers prefer someone else fuck a pussy. Make's the studies right that cucks are gay.
Anonymousover 1 year agoThe story had promise despite the Luca/Luka errors. But why did he have a wife and daughter with him? They were not in the story.
Also, you use weird English:
'We received a company' ???
'Her eyes were two billiard balls' What? 1 red and 1 white?
But your worst mistake is constant repetition, as if you think the reader is not following your description.
(Grammar mistakes - think in terms of 3am in the morning)
... keeping the bikini top pressed to her tits to prevent it from falling down and revealing her breasts ...
The sentence is complete at the word tits.
... She untied her top again, removing it completely from her tits ...
As opposed to what? From her nose?
... He was only wearing his shorts and was naked from the waist up ...
Everybody wearing only shorts is naked from the waist up.
... a very generous cleavage area, exposing the top part of her small, perky breasts ...
Another 9 words we don't need.
... I spilled the bear through my nose ... made me laugh out loud!
I suggest you leave the story alone for a week, then re-read it, and cut out a third of your descriptions. But if you don't know what is wrong with the example '3am in the morning' - give it up.
Anonymousover 1 year agoWhat you mean is that if you're a person who has no self-control you just do anything you damn well please and consequences be damned. Funny thing about consequences. They happen whether we want them to or not.
