All Comments on 'Rete and Trident Vol. 01'

incredibly great piece of work

It was an incredibly great piece of work. I sort of knew where this was going when Pete was leading Riley down the garden path towards doing a John Wick impersonation, but when she reappeared on the scene and brutally attacked that guy "get off of my husband!!" I was like, well, I was chuckling pretty hard. Seems old Pete/Will has a real big problem. Oh what the hell, I could totally see a relationship working between two people with anti-social personality disorder, it's actually NOT that uncommon. In fact, in a lot of ways, it's the only type of relationship that could be sustained for a long time.

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I know it's been a year since you wrote this (really long) chapter. Hope there's a part 2 coming up some day. It's by far the most engaging thing you've written here.

Excellent start! You need a better editor/proofreader, but I enjoyed the story and characters quite a bit.

Normally I would not bother to comment on a story so poorly written. If you don’t take the time and invest the effort to proofread your craft and correct bonehead mistakes, I’m not inclined to offer feedback. But this story was very good. Unfortunately, I had to slow way down to correct your mistakes as I read. I like the story; I hate the fact you think so poorly of the reader that you don’t finish the job of writing it by proofreading it. Three stars until you treat your readers with respect. Great potential here. Looking forward to the second part. One can only hope that the delay in posting the second part is due to your efforts in having it proofread and properly edited.

Great story it's started very well. Hoping to see more on a regular basis. I'm hoping it won't be too long in coming. This is very Mr and Mrs Smith/Mission Impossible both of which I enjoy so am looking forward to the next installments. Pete/Will is in for a very bumpy ride because I don't think Riley/Olivia is willing to let him go even though she can see why he's angry and upset with her. I don't think she understands because I don't think she has any empathy for anyone. But let's wait and see what happens. BardnotBard

Good start

exciting and well written story. I liked how the author shows the emotions of the characters, and also how he knows how to evoke the emotions of the readers. Of course it's 5*. But I feel a little sorry for Sunny, she won't live long, Riley will kill her, no doubt.

Absolutely crazy and wild. The way he turned the tables on the attackers was amazing. The dressing down of Bollard was good to see. She was a real bitch. She really didn't have the facts. I don't seem him as a psychopath. Just someone who is morally gray. Yes he manipulated Riley but he also gave her chance via the notebook. Their marriage was dead as soon as she came for him to cuckold him with a gangbang. She fell in love.with Mark and also infatuated with the "god of cock" regardless of being first drugged unknowingly and then later with consent with meth. She is a sociopath. The extension of their working together under a new cover for a part 2 that is nearly 8 months in the waiting is a disappointment. He should have gotten the chance to move on. There is no marriage there. Her betrayal is too epic. Sure she is remorseful. So what? Four weeks of constant group sex, weeks of premeditated and grooming yo get her husband ready for the cuckolding. Whatever. She is a loose cannon and psychotic. The agency would never use her again. She is too much a risk. Put her into WITSEC and have ehr watched. Give Peter a different job under a new cover that gives him some stability. The assassination cleanup of them as a cover couple makes no sense. Still 5 stars for all the creativity and the imagination. Also well written.

Liked the story, was a 5 until you waffled on about US security and armed forces stuff. No more interesting than an Mustang obsession.

Great story, waiting forvolume 2

Oops, just read your bio. So yes one volume a year. Thx.

Hmm. Judging from the original release date you’re aiming for one chapter/volume per year? Or was this a one off and the vol. 1 was a tease?

I read the whole darned thing. Very imaginative, very compelling. Please give us chapter 2.

Keep going,very interested in the pair's conquest to achieve the goal presented to them..This tale is entertaining,well written and absorbing..5 stars..JZK

Finish this one and then stop wasting your time here.

Vince Flynn is gone, he needs someone to take the reins with a new character or two that stand on their own merits.

I'll keep looking for your Book.

Great job with characters, plot and consistent continuity that leaves decades of spin-off stories waiting for you to write.

Take the leap, you'll never regret it.

Really enjoyed this tale. Would love to see more of the Rete and Trident saga.

Very high quality. Best of Lit for sure. Emotional journey, tension, action. I could see this as a movie. "Alias: Rete and Trident" makes a unique and alluring title I think.

Wow.....Just Wow....One of the best stories in Lit....

next chapter soon please...*5*

And yeah, hurry up with the next chapter!

⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ Kinda long, out of necessity. I like it.

Very good.

Tremendous, pls post Vol 2 asap.

Still waiting for volume 2. Please

Loved it

Absurd but I can’t put it down

Gloriously OTT story that is fascinating to read.

Wow - great story - your a hell of writer - hope you write more !

@Anon: "There may be a bigger crock of overdone horseshit on this site, but I’ve never seen it."

You weren't trying very hard, then. LW alone has overblown nonsense on the regular that eclipses this, and without the benefit of interesting characters. But I guess hyperbole helps sell an opinion.

Eager to read many more chapters. Great job!! Thank you.

This is top 5 first installment stories in this genre. And the LW genre is by far the best on this site.

And I've read ALL of the best LW stories and series here over the past 15 years.

This is that good in terms of a story.

My hope is that this author writes or is working on at least 2 more installments for this story in the next few months.

And a big "fuck you" to those bastards who post in comments to nitpic the story about a few spelling and grammar issues. Go eat a dick.

Holy shit!

I can't even process all the layers to this. One of my many favorite parts was the scene on pages 10-11 where Pete verbally turns the tables on the Madame Secretary.

Amazing story.

When the vol.2 will be posted ?

There may be a bigger crock of overdone horseshit on this site, but I’ve never seen it. If it was in humour and satire it may have passed as a fun piece.

I loved this story, kept me reading all day long. The characters are well written. Having to work with the ex wife just killed it at the end. I do hope you continue this one. I will be patiently waiting for another fix.

Wonderful story. One of the best. I hope you continue.

So good, please add more soon. I don't have alot longer to live and would love to see it's ending. Thank you.

don't stop there. plenty of story left. please continue.

Well his new wife or old wife depending, sure has something to be proud of, or does she? 24 people dead? She seems to take instructions very well. A very good and bloody story. It is suffering from many typos and wrong sentences using wrong words or missing some. I would have listed them so our author could have made corrections but there were too many and the story was very long. 4 stars from me I felt there was much that could have been left out to make it flow better. It was good though and I enjoyed reading it, again!

Good bloody fun! He’ll be boinking wifey again in no time, self preservation if nothing else

More Please!

Part 2 please! Excellent work, riveting. My only complaint is thst part 2 is not here now :)

I posted anonymous because I am unable create a login for some reason

By far the best story I've ever read ! Was impossible to put it down! Scary how relative it is to the current political situation in this country!

Good story. But knowing who and what her Father was (could not even call him Dad in front of her husband only stating Him …) surely she would not have been drawn into all that. And she would have contacted her Daddy over her husband’s supposed infidelity before contemplating anything else even if drugged she would have eventually called him

Overly long, overly detailed-PAGES!-sex scenes. Less is more!

The MC would never be paired up. The mission calls for well trained professionals. NO mistakes are allowed. Olivia is a train wreck waiting to happen. Also, she's a sociopathic nymphomainic who loses all control very quickly. She should have been turned out to pasture under constant security. Actually she so great a risk she should be eliminated.

Sadly it appears this story will never be completed. Hopefully some will pick this up and FTDS.

On page one

years of my life. I had no idea how my wife was compromised, but orders or not, leaving my wife to the mercy of these animals without even talking to her first was inconceivable to me.

Expcptional atory, 5,5,5 Page turner. One pf the better adventure- apt stories on LW. Ends with the hook bated and set.

Thank You.

"dgfergie4: As usual the ANONS are out i force with negative comments, many of which are just downright rude. ANONS try writing a story yourself, I's easy to criticize, that's why everyone does it."

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First, ALL Lit users are ANONS, you too, since a nickname is not a verified identity, and all users can even post with multiple nicknames and also as ANONS.

Second, every user, as by the platform rules, has the right to give its feedback, positive or negative, to the authors, about their stories: it doesn't require to have a fake identity nickname to do that, nor to be an author and write stories by itself. If you want to change the rules, make another Platform by yourself.

Third, this is LitEROTICA, so if a tale have a lot of sex, it's not strange, nor a bad thing. In particular this story has a good mix of sex, action and drama, but, anyway, every reader has the right to express its opinion.

Last, as many users already said: "it's just fiction!", everything can happen.

As usual the ANONS are out i force with negative comments, many of which are just downright rude. ANONS try writing a story yourself, I's easy to criticize, that's why everyone does it.

It was a good story based on and undercover investigation. But there was way to much emphasis on sex, talking about, dwelling on, using it as the focal point for running an international criminal organization ruled by women involved in a myriad of different types of illegal activities including controlling government entities. Most of these designed to control people and make money. Too much emphasis on sex took away from the characters and their rolls of the being mobsters and good guys. Please check out Todd172 stories, very well written, lots of action and barely a mention of sex yet very entertaining. This story had its moments but would have been much better being a little shorter with exclusion of pages and pages dwelling on somewhat perverted sex scenes. Keep writing and keep that in mind. Basically a good story.

I'm not sure what all of the commenters below read, but I wish I had read it. Instead, I read the excessively long and error prone thing you posted. It had it's moments, but not nearly enough for 15 Lit pages. Mostly it was a slog. The worst was when I was finally getting to the "end" and didn't see an end in sight. I had missed that this bloated mass was just volume 1. Maybe it will get better, but I'm not looking forward to volume 2...

Can you update your Bio section with the news about your upcoming works ?

Just a point of correction- Georgetown does not have fraternities and sororities.

I have to say that overall I enjoyed the story, despite utterly implausible storyline. There were quite a number of spelling mistakes and grammatical errors with a few incorrect word substitutions although to be fair, they didn’t distract too much from the story. I am looking forward to the next chapter.

Best story I have read on this site.5 stars from Xluckylee. Can't wait to read the next part.

Brilliant.

The most entertaining story I've read on this site.

I can't wait for chapter 2.

This story of your is a first for me. Done well and written well with lots of typos but hopefully you'll get much better! You wrote an excellent story masustacy, very, very well written. Might I make a suggestion? I've helped quit a few Authors here by suggesting that you get a copy of Text Aloud and use it to write your stories. It is an Authors best friend. One of the best things about it is with a voice installed,(so many to choose from) you can listen to your story being read back to you allowing you to catch your typos and give you pause to add, or delete or change your Characters and plot. 5 BIG ASS FUCKING HUGE FLAMING NOVA STARS for a score. Excellent, thank you.

Phenomenal story.

Really hope there's more to come.

"You may want to change this to NOT copy. "Do copy this story off of this site.""

And maybe, publishing a copyrighted version on Amazon just to better protect the work, just like another great author, Todd172, already did:

https://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=3292194&page=bio

"We did that partly because so many have asked us to, partly because it was just something new to do, and partly as to protect the work - there are people who skim sites for stories then publish them as ebooks under false names."

LIT+Amazon would be a more solid mix.

I enjoyed this story a lot.

My total career was working for the Unites States Government.

Retired now 23 years.

Our government is not suppose to work like this story; However!!!!!

I am not denying something like this could happen.

Russia poisons it's own spy's that turn..

USA has done some weird things..

Have a good one You-al

Thanks for the good story!

You may want to change this to NOT copy.

"Do copy this story off of this site."

Good beginning!

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I wonder where the author will lead us next? RAAC on behalf of and for the glory of the nation? I will allow myself to embark on a prediction and conspiracy theory. Consider their code names. "Rete" is a net, that is, something that is caught, entangled. "Trident" is a fork with three prongs, three pins. Do you feel where I'm going? Will, as if with a fishing net, will fish out and lure three cocks at a time, organizing foursome sex with Olivia and after an orgy - they kill them, tired and relaxed. Bingo!

Totally over the top.

I really enjoyed it thoroughly thanks!

"I'm not sure what got into me, but I pulled her vulva over my face and licked her clean. I'd never done anything remotely like that before."

Well, that's all - latently, in the depths of his consciousness, he became a cuckold. Although, he claims that he would rather die than put up with cuckolding - emotionally, secretly - he already craved it. Seeing all these big members of his prisoners, hearing his wife's story about the greatest pleasure she experienced with her lovers, plus the presence of his wife and Kimsu naked and extremely excited - all this broke him... He is already ready to lick his sperm, but in fact - he wants to suck out other people's creampies and get sloppy seconds after alpha males. He is a ready obedient cuckold...

Great start!

What an imaginative story, great plot and well written, with only a couple of errors.

I take it there is to be a Volumn 2? You intimated this given this is Volumn 1.

Publish here asap l look forward to more of this cracker story.

This story scores 5/5 and deservedly so.

She needs him quit letting her talk to him like a chump.

Wow, publishable story. Amazing characters, excellent set ups, compelling plot lines. A real winner.

More

Write a book

Well, next episode is going to be a "Bonny and Clyde" ruthless couple, looking for blood. Too much violence in this tale? We can ask the 3 letter US agencies if this too much violence is realistic in those spying secret missions. This kind of spy-action novels reminds some plots written by other great authors, like Todd172, Saddletramp and Texican1830: so, more of these !

Happy to see that this great tale has reached the H goal, 4.5+ stars ! Really well deserved. About the story too much long, maybe so... but since it's written like a movie, reading it all without interruptions, make the plot really much more enjoyable. Can you update the biography section with info about the planned new releases ?

Laying out that path for her to survive was so twisted...I loved it! Looking forward to Volume Two.

He happily maimed the bad guys but didn’t kill them. He left that to his wife. That really doesn’t make sense.

Regardless, you’re a good writer.

Hard to sort the intentional names changes with the mistaken but a great spy tale anyway. Will be hard to eliminate 39 high government officials and politicians without blowing cover. Hope you can do it credibly.

he needs to get over himself prick give her a second chance

Brilliant very well written by a talented story teller.Really enjoying and hope the next part/s come soon

Well done. Great story line, good characters and character development, realistic dialogue and a good pace.

Now for the criticism- get an editor.

Reminds me of the Rolly Chortle Snack operation out of the AQTS back in 64.

FANTASTIC story!!!!

Really GREAT!!!!

Congratulations!!!! 5 totally deserved stars from here!!!

Any info about the planned number of episodes and about when they will be published ?

By the way: "I reserve the rights to this story. Do copy this story off of this site."

maybe it was "Don't copy this story off of this site" ?

All in all, a really good plot, good writing, good mix of different elements, realistic characters, really entertaining, certainly one of the best, that deserves at least the full 5* ! Keep going !

Magic! I love this type of tale. I have a book shelf full of spy stories. I hope we will not have wait too long for Ch.2.

Crazy, entertaining, satisfying and fairly well written.

Full marks.

Outstanding story! Dont listen to naysayers. It’s to long, it’s to short. Once you start reading you don’t want to stop. Thanks Masustacy! 5*

Hey, its all good, right? A ridiculous story about ridiculous characters doing unbelievable contradictory and totally illogical choices, behaviors, and beliefs. So you are using the "...path" plot device: socio, psycho, whatever fig leaf you can grab to cover otherwise outrageous self destructing and really really stupid ideas and actions. The cuck was lied to, LIED TO! The wife was heavily and repeatedly drugged to the point of a dicktion (I didn't know semen was a drug.) Dr. Jekyll/Mr. Hyde used a magic elixir too. But this reads like Martian Slut Ray. The whore decided to betray her marriage well before she found out how good the sex was going to be. They punked her like the captain of the high school football team fucking his way through the freshman cheerleaders. Riley was cake.

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So now we have a mildly entertaining action cartoon, with lots a blood and bullets. We even have an "M" character and two special agents who's mission is pretty straight forward: go kill these 39 people. Why not? Most of the characters in this story are already brain dead. And if I keep reading this dreck I will probably be among them. Maybe then I should run for President? I know, take a number.

Apart from some evident literary mistakes, this plot is certainly one of the best in the adventure-spyonage genre, in this platform. Realistic and detailed dialogues, action and passional drama make this very well written tale a good candidate for a movie. So, waiting for the next "movie" of this serial, we can just pay the right ticket: 5+ stars !

Very nice start. First off I would suggest that once you have proofed the story, that you have someone else read it and go over some of the mistakes and things that did not mesh up. Second I suggest that you break the story up into smaller parts, (like the cheating being one part, the confrontation another part, and the ending action another part). This will help flush out the MC and supporting actors. Just remember to look at it as a whole and ask yourself is this plausible or how real is this or could this happen. Even though the story is fiction the closer to a real setting the more enjoyable the read will become.

Excellent story, thank you. Well structured: good character development. I might have been tempted to say a few words when the arsehole bitch Bollard was telling them that she "owned" them. That they had no resources and no options. (Yes, I have been in Special Forces and know the consequences of speaking out against senior Officers. It never stopped me. In fact, it was a part of us that made us successful)

Remember, the couple had lost all their assets, including his beloved muscle car. I would have said that her offering the POSSIBILITY of financial reward at the completion of this hugely impossible task, wasn't good enough. That X dollars would have to be made to an account for each successful "termination". I'd respectfully remind her that "if we were able to get at these senior Governmental and Political figures successfully, we could get at ANYONE". A direct look would have sent the correct message to Bollard. "Give us our financial reward... or be it on your head!"

Oh yes, it was also wrong to say the US doesn't use certain people and "Black Ops" people to "terminate" individuals by any means necessary. I've met some and worked with them.

15 long pages...... and I wish it had been more. Gripping story with all kinds of plot twists and unique characters. Won't even try to analyze it too deep, as it's FICTION. Thanks for posting this.

Dang son.....good story.....keep writing....I usually don't rate until the end but I am giving this one a 5

If nixrox couldn't get past the first paragraph, how could he possibly know only to give it one star? What I hear him saying is, 'I'm not too bright and didn't feel like reading this story, so to be a complete asshole and somehow absolve myself, I'm only giving it one star.' Well, frankly I found it a bit long but very entertaining, and give it five stars.

Great story. One of the best I’ve read here. Maybe one of the complainers will offer to proofread for you. Well worth a few mistakes.

Sloppy writing

Obviously poor or no proof reading

When can we expect future chapters? Please don’t leave us hanging.

Wow! 5* on the story line. 3* on technical execution/editing. 4.5* on overall style, language and pacing.

Would be better if it was tidied up I lost count of how many times Matt Gilbert's name changed. Plus it was littered with other various typos

Very entertaining story.

Needs massive cleanup of incorrect words, missing words and other technical errors to make it more enjoyable to read.

If Pete is a psychopath and Riley is a sociopath why not leave them together as a couple rather than inflicting them on other innocent people who don't need that kind of crap in their lives?

Outstanding story, one of the few in LW category that I added to favorites. Keep up the good work.

I was not expecting this in the LW. Great series start.